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1、专题14 如何续写八类话题在高中阶段，一周最多有时间练一篇续写。我们不仅要写一篇会一篇，更要写一篇会一类，因为同一主题下的续写情节是可以复用的。通过把知识系统化，同一主题下很多情节是相似的，题目的情节是相似的，这又会导致后面在设计续写时的续写情节相似，而续写情节相似其实又指的是场景相似+感情相似。这样一环套一环，有意识的归纳（1）每篇续写前文的情节；（2）续写范文中的场景；（3）续写范文中的感情。这样就可以实现模块化写作了。一、助人篇故事构造三部曲【第一步：困难描写（消极情绪+困难处境）】【消极情绪】感到：1. a flush of (表情绪的名词)=a wave of.=a feeling/

2、sense of.一阵.2. joy/excitement/pride/anger/rage/panic/terror/sorrow/sadness/grief/embarrassment/disappointment/guilt/shame.)3. (表情绪的名词) flooded over sb=swept over sb因.颤抖：tremble/shiver/shake (with fear, panic excitement, rage.)【进一步细节描写】流泪：1. Tears blurred ones eyes. 2. Ones eyes got misty. 3. Ones ey

3、es misted/dimmed with tears.泪眼模糊4. .be close to tears几乎要哭了5. tears (roll down ones eyes/cheeks/face)泪水落下【第二步：助人过程呈现（想到办法+动作链）】【突然有了一个想法】某人想到/明白.：1. It suddenly occurred to sb that 从句=It hit sb that 从句=It struck me that 从句 =It dawned on sb that 从句2. (idea, thought.) occurred/came to sb.=.came/flashed

4、 into ones mind=.crowded in ones mind3. Ones mind began to race 【动作链】1. 主语+动作A+动作B and 动作C （三个并列谓语，动作依次发生） 2. 句子+ing/ed, 或者ing/ed+句子（使用条件：同一逻辑主语，主动或被动，表示动作伴随，原因或结果）【第三步：皆大欢喜结局（感激+感动+升华）】【突然有了一个想法】过了一段时间：1. not long after that,.=shortly afterwards, .=before long, .=It didnt take long before 从句=It too

5、k some time before从句不久, . 2. for an instant/moment一瞬间有了结果：1. To ones surprise(delight)/Strangely enough, it turned out that 从句2. But on second thoughts, .但是转而一想，.3. But what happened next was pure magic. 接下来发生的非常奇妙 【感谢】1. Now, I was definitely grateful to her for extending a helping hand(伸出援手).2. Mo

6、lly and Shawn met on Tuesday, and she says she couldnt thank him enough (非常感谢他)and everyone involved in for what they did for her. 【感动】1. Needless to say, they were deeply moved (他们被深深地感动了), especially Bernard who finally found a way to make money for his family. 2. He was touched that I, a complete

7、 stranger, cared so much about him (如此关心他) and said he was willing to work.3. In a flash, with tears welling up in my eyes, I was touched beyond words (感动得说不出话来). I felt so warm as if there were nine suns in my chest. 4. I nodded in gratitude, eyes glistening with held-back tears(眼睛因强忍的泪水而闪耀).5. Stu

8、nned and moved(惊讶又感动), I stared at the note, feeling a pang of guilt about my previous thought that all people were indifferent.【升华】 1. It is love that makes the world go round（是爱让世界运转）and Bernard felt it deep in his little heart.2. Everyone was happy and sweet, exposing their sets of white teeth（露出

9、他们洁白的牙齿）.3. I made up my mind to pass on “love” to others（传递爱给其他人）. Just as a saying goes : “ Roses given, fragrance in hand（赠人玫瑰，手有余香）. ”4. From that day on, every time I meet someone who needs help, I always reach out to them, hoping to pass on the kindness （希望传递善意）that Mexican family offered me.5

10、. Sometimes, a small act of kindness may be powerful enough to make a huge difference（会有很大不同）.2023年新高考I&II卷【作文比赛】作者上中学的时候，社会学老师邀请作者参加一个写作比赛。作者不喜欢写作，于是想都没想就拒绝了。但是在老师的鼓励下，作者同意试一试。作者在写作过程中虽然很累，但是没有放弃，坚持下来了。在作者最终完成写作时，作者感到写作让他很快乐，他已经不在乎输赢了。【第三步：皆大欢喜结局（感激+感动+升华）】【感谢】 I was so happy to hear the news that

11、I immediately shared it with my teacher. When I was invited to the stage to receive the award, I expressed my thanks to my teacher. I said, “Its you who make me fall in love with writing, my social studies teacher. Without your recognition and guidance, I couldnt have written this article. Again tha

12、nk you very much!”【感动】“I knew youd win! I am proud of you. You made it!” he said excitedly.My teacher was waiting for me. Holding my hands, he said “Congratulations! You are a good writer, so keep writing.”【升华】 Since then, I have written many good works and now I am a famous writer. I owe my success

13、 to my social teacher who is a beacon in my life on the road to writing.二、成长篇故事构造三部曲【第一步：成长前的苦恼（负面情绪塑造）】【孤独】 I never made friends easily, and for a time I did little more than get on speaking terms with some boys. 我从不轻易交朋友，有一段时间，我只是和一些男孩子说说话而已。【伤心】 I found nothing in my pocket, a fact that seemed li

14、ke a spear piercing into my heart ，which started to bleed immediately. 我口袋里什么也没找到，这事实就像一支长矛刺进了我的心脏，我的心脏立刻开始流血。Looking around anxiously, I almost burst into crying.(我焦急地环顾四周，差点哭出来) 【惭愧】She was overwhelmed / overcome/ consumed with guilt and shame .(她被内疚和羞愧淹没) A wave of guilt swept over me and I had t

15、o admit the fact that I had gone to the movies and that was the real reason why I was late.一阵内疚席卷了我，我不得不承认我去看电影了，这才是我迟到的真正原因。【嘲笑】They laughed loudly with Crawley screaming words like “What a finest broken watch!”他们大声笑着，卡劳利尖叫着说:“多好的一块坏表啊!”【绝望】“My mother wouldnt let me bring it,” I lied, desperation b

16、oiling inside me.“我妈妈不让我带，”我撒了个谎，绝望在我心里沸腾。【紧张】Meanwhile, Karie sat restlessly in her seat with her fingers crossed .与此同时，凯莉不安地坐在座位上，双手交叉着。She told the teacher the truth , with her heart thumping / pounding/ pumping like a drum. 她把实情告诉了老师，心怦怦直跳。Having paced up and down restlessly in front of the the

17、teachers office, she finally gathered courage and plodded in.（她在老师的办公室前不安地踱来踱去，终于鼓起勇气，慢吞吞地走了进去。【害怕】I unknowingly (不知不觉地) avoided interacting (interact) with anyone because I was afraid theyd laugh in my face .(我在不知不觉中避免与任何人互动，因为我害怕他们会当面嘲笑我)【犯错】Considering there was no way to persuade my mother to le

18、t me take the watch, I decided to wait for her to step outside and slip the watch into my pocket. So I did. 考虑到没有办法说服母亲让我带手表，我决定等她走出去，把手表塞进我的口袋里,我这样做了。Karie stuffed the test paper into backpack and explained that she was just too excited. 凯莉把试卷塞进背包里，解释说她只是太兴奋了。【第二步：成长中（蜕变塑造）】【惊讶】Raising her eyebrows

19、 in surprise, Mrs Rossi froze, as if rooted on the ground.罗西夫人惊讶地扬起眉毛，僵住了，仿佛在地上生了根。【希望】Jayce looked up to him, his eyes sparkling with hope and determination.杰斯抬头看着他，他的眼睛里闪烁着希望和决心。【教育与成长】“Thats not the right way. Patience, Will. Patience,” a voice echoed in my ears after the boys left.这不是正确的方法。耐心，意志

20、。当孩子们离开后，一个声音在我的耳边回响。“What was done was done,” thought I to myself. “What is important now is to do correct things next.”“所做的已经做了，”我自己想。“现在重要的是下一步要纠正一些事情。”Though anger, embarrassment and sadness hung heavily in the air, the voice drew me to the awareness of the mistakes I had made when I attempted t

21、o impress the boys.尽管愤怒、尴尬和悲伤重重地笼罩在空气中，但这个声音还是让我意识到我在试图给同学留下深刻印象时犯下的错误。I shouldnt have tried to integrate in such a hasty way, nor should I have stolen the watch behind my mother.我不该如此匆忙的方式试图融入，也不该把母亲身后的手表偷走。After school, I would tell my mother honestly that I had stolen the watch out to impress fri

22、ends who turned out not to be my true friends.放学后，我会诚实地告诉妈妈，我偷了手表是为了给那些不是我真正朋友的朋友留下好印象。After saying that with her face flushed red, she handed the paper and the prize to the teacher. 说完这话，脸红了，她把纸和奖品交给了老师。To my surprise, she smiled at me and expressed her apology for ignoring my loneliness as well as

23、 my difficulty with English communication.令我吃惊的是，她对我笑了笑，并为忽视我的孤独和英语交流的困难表示道歉。Torn between the honor and conscience, she had a restless night, tossing and turning on bed. 她在荣誉和良心之间挣扎，一夜不安，在床上辗转反侧。I plucked up my courage and took my first step onto the suspension bridge. 我鼓起勇气，向吊索桥走了第一步。He saw Trashau

24、n as a tough role model who had a seemingly similar born disability but led a brilliant life. 他认为特拉申是一个坚强的榜样，似乎有类似的先天残疾，但过着辉煌的生活。 We often take for granted the very things that most deserve our gratitude(那些值得我们感恩的事情我们经常当作理所当然).But when the time came, I got up on stage and faced one of my greatest fe

25、ars-and discovered I could do more than I ever gave myself credit for.(但当时机到来的时候，我站上舞台，面对我最大的恐惧之一我发现我可以做的比我自己认为的更多。【第三步：成长后的升华（喜悦+感激+升华）】【喜悦】Dad looked at the paper, with his lips curving into a smile. （爸爸看着报纸,他的嘴唇弯成了微笑）Hearing that, Karie grinned from ear to ear, a wave of happiness flooding over h

26、er. （听到这话，卡里咧嘴一笑,幸福的浪潮涌上她的心头)（2020.11月潍坊高三英语期中考试）【感激】I looked at her, tears of love and gratitude welling up in my eyes.我看着她，爱和感激的泪水在我的眼睛里涌出。【结尾句】I knew for sure that every time I lost patience in the future I would remember my grandfathers words.(我确信，将来每次我失去耐心，我就会想起我祖父的话。)It was the first time that

27、 I had truly realized the meaning of the gift - patience. (我第一次真正体会到这份礼物 耐心的意义)Aram said, “Thanks, Mrs Rossi, for teaching me how to make a cake to realize my dream.” Mrs Rossi held his hands, saying, “ It is you who teach me how to stick to my dream.”亚兰说：“谢谢罗西夫人，你教我如何做蛋糕来实现我的梦想。”罗西太太握着他的手说：“是你教我如何坚

28、持我的梦想。It dawned on Aram that “One should stick to his/her dream no matter what happens.” (亚兰明白了一个人应该坚持她的梦想，无论发生什么)So thankful was he for Cathys honesty that he actually ended up donating a generous amount to VNSA to show his gratitude.他非常感谢凯茜的诚实，他向VNSA捐赠了一大笔钱来表达他的感激之情。 Bravery was the most significa

29、nt quality that I wanted her to possess. 勇敢是我希望她拥有的最重要的品质 Afterwards, it was my turn to give a small lecture,in which I expressed my sincere gratitude to my mom and friends,bowing to them several times. 之后，轮到我做了一个小型讲座，在会上我向妈妈和朋友们表达了诚挚的感谢，并向他们多次鞠躬。Then he patted Jayces head, “But I think this is the

30、perfect way God made me. With five fingers, we also made it in lots of things just now. The missing arm is like a wing folded by an angel.Only when youre tough will you see the wing.他拍了拍杰斯的头，“但我认为这是上帝创造我的完美方式。”用五个手指，我们现在还做了很多东西。这个缺失的手臂就像一只被天使折叠起来的翅膀。只有当你很坚强的时候，你才会看到翅膀。成长类场景描写【学习知识而成长】Its never too l

31、ate to learn. Each individual has the right to accept more challenges and make more attempts.学习永远为时不晚。每个人都应该并且有权利去接受更多的挑战，做更多尝试。【分析】individual这里表示“个人，个体”。make more attempts 做更多尝试。【发挥天赋促成长】Actually, every individual possesses talent. Be brave when you find it and also make efforts. You can create mir

32、acles in the end. 事实上，每个人都有天赋，发现它的时候要勇敢，也要付出努力，最终你会创造奇迹。【分析】possess 拥有。create miracles表示创造奇迹。【追逐梦想而成长】Its never too late to go for your dream. As long as you grasp every opportunity and take full advantage of it, you will stand a chance to realize your dreams.追梦永远不晚。只要你抓住机会，充分利用机会，你就有机会实现梦想。As long

33、as we dare to dream and dont let difficulties get in our way, anything is possible.只要我们敢于梦想，不被困难所阻挡，一切皆有可能。【分析】take full advantage of 充分利用， realize your dreams表示“实现梦想”【克服困难促而成长】The journey to success is not smooth. It is full of challenges and difficulties. We should be brave to face them. As long a

34、s we dont give up hope and make every effort to overcome all the difficulties, we will surely achieve our goal (success) finally.通往成功的路不会平坦，充满挑战和艰辛。我们要勇敢面对。只要不放弃希望并竭尽全力克服所有困难，我们最终会实现我们的目标（成功）。【分析】smooth 表示“平坦的”overcome all the difficulties 表示“克服困难”；make every effort 表示“做出努力”；as long as，表示“只要”，引导条件状语

35、从句。2024年1月浙江省高考首考【路痴Eva】Eva在高中的第一周很努力去适当新环境。对Eva来讲，最大的挑战就是在偌大的校园里找方向。因为方向感差，她决定只记住上课的地方。在体育课上，教练Pitt要求同学们跑一英里。这对Eva来说，又是一个极大的挑战。通过对自己的心理暗示，Eva决定不再关注一英里的距离，而是专注于力争跑到跑道上的下一个具体的点，比如那棵橡树的影子或跑道的拐弯处。最终，她成功地完成了跑步。【第二步：成长中（蜕变塑造）】【惊讶】When Coach Pitt said “Nice work!” to her at the finish line, Eva was surpri

36、sed. What had seemed to be a challenging task to her minutes before was now accomplished. A mile was never what she had thought a long way!【希望】Coach Pitts encouraging affirmation improved her self-identity. Fear and uneasiness began to fade away and a sense of confidence came to her. 【教育与成长】It marke

37、d a turning point where she learned the trick that it was her persistence and appropriate strategy that mattered. Furthermore, she realized that she could overcome troubles in life as long as shifting the way of thinking. 【第三步：成长后的升华（喜悦+感激+升华）】【喜悦】 To Eva, such experiences brought her a giant step o

38、f growth.【感激】Thanking Coach Pitt, she had a great thought running in her mind. 【结尾句】Though sometimes it seemed an impossible mission, it eventually turned a precious opportunity for growth. It was a magic trick!三、趣事篇故事构造“两大核心技巧”【核心技巧1：矛盾塑造（尴尬+紧张）】 So nervous was he that (他太紧张了) he dropped the electr

39、ic carvingknife.他太紧张了，他太紧张了，他掉下了电动雕刻刀。I got into a panic(陷入惊慌之中) as I pressed firmly against the table and moved my head around trying to find the right angle, but it was no use.当我紧紧地压在桌子上，我的头移动试图找到正确的角度时，我陷入了恐慌(陷入惊慌之中)，但这是没有用的。Sweating and nearly tearing (汗流浃背，眼泪差点流下来),I could imagine how silly and

40、 strange I was at that moment based on the continuing laughter from my parents and Jason.汗流浃背，眼泪差点流下来，根据我父母和杰森持续的笑声，我可以想象出我当时是多么的愚蠢和奇怪。Blushing scarlet instantly, she felt embarrassment almost wreathed her entirely.她立刻涨红了脸，感到尴尬几乎把她整个包围起来。【核心技巧2：快乐结局塑造（感激+开心）】Dads calm smile reflected his motto Alls

41、well with us, never fear.爸爸平静的微笑反映了他的座右铭一切都好，永远不要害怕。It was the first time that I had truly realized the meaning of patience.这是我第一次真正意识到耐心的意义。We usually take life for granted, but the story shows us that there is always beauty in our heart.我们通常认为生活是理所当然的，但这个故事告诉我们，在我们的心中永远有美丽。The words brought warmth

42、 to my heart and tears to my eyes. I felt lucky to be a part of this mischievous yet loving family. 这些话让我心中满是温暖，也让我热泪盈眶。我很幸运能成为这个淘气而又充满爱的家庭的一员。2024年1月浙江省高考首考【南瓜卡头】一个家庭在万圣节南瓜雕刻的传统。作者与弟弟们在寻找最大的南瓜，并在厨房桌子上进行雕刻。作者试图将头塞进南瓜里证明自己的南瓜是最大的，但却发现自己的头被困在了南瓜里。【核心技巧1：矛盾塑造（尴尬+紧张）】Panic turned into desperation as I s

43、truggled, the weight of the pumpkin pressing down on me, my breath echoing in the confined space. My familys initial laughter turned into concern, and they gathered around, offering advice and encouragement. My moms voice was soothing as she told me to stay calm, while my siblings worried faces peer

44、ed at me. 【核心技巧2：快乐结局塑造（感激+开心）】The room erupted in cheers, and I was met with hugs and relieved smiles. My face was red, and my pride slightly bruised, but the warmth of my familys support made it all worthwhile.The image of me with a pumpkin stuck on my head became a symbol of our familys joy, crea

45、tivity, and ability to turn even the most awkward situations into something positive. That year, the pumpkin carving wasnt just about competition; it was a reminder of the love, laughter, and togetherness that defined our family.四、亲情篇故事构造“三板斧”【第一板斧：冲突构造（误会、犯错等）】只有冲突才能体会亲情的弥足珍贵。冲突原因大致有：疏于陪伴、理念不合（代沟）、

46、误会等。这一部分可以给出的情感是：生气，难过，后悔，内疚，烦恼，伤心。【生气】我妈妈瞪着我，这是在我有一个重组家庭之前她从未做过的事。“你可以捡起来的。”她说。“那才对。”My mother glanced at me. Something she never did before I had a stepfamily. “You could have picked it up. she said. “That would have been the kind thing to do.”他生气地握紧拳头，但是弟弟却激动地挥着手。He folded his fist angrily, but h

47、is younger brother waved his hands excitedly.Jackson 试着说什么，但Carter太生气了，他一个字也听不进去。Jackson kept saying something, but so angry was Carter that he couldnt even hear a word .【后悔】我意识到我裙子上的蝴蝶结打得很不好。我本应该请妈妈帮忙的。I realized how poorly I tied the string on my skirt which was over leggings. I should have asked

48、mom for help.【内疚】一想到我对他所做的一切，遗憾和内疚就像没休止的潮水一样向我袭来。 Thinking about what I had done to him, regret and guilt overwhelmed me like endless tides.每当我想到亨利湿了的书，我的脸都会变红了。Whenever I thought of Henrys wet book, my face turned red. 【烦恼】Watching Shirleys smile fading away, Peter frowned.看着雪莉的微笑渐渐消失，彼得皱起了眉头。 【伤心】当她望过她三岁妹妹的桌子时，Amanda感觉她的心情像天空一样灰暗。Amand