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1、 1、内容：抓“述位”P1首句找述位核心内容 述位矛盾/特点(形容词/动宾)扩写方式：原文相关事物(尾段)+与主角互动2、句式建议场景转换：While/When/As/the momentsb1/sth.,sb2dosth 情绪+动作：“adj.+as/though+sbwas,sbdosthadj.+as/though+sbwas,sbdosth”(含转折意味)情绪+动作：“并列情绪形容词/副词，sbdosth，(独立主格:五官神态)”.无灵主语句：心理情绪(无灵主语)+后半句：定从(进一步描写述位)对话/独白：“.(小短句)”sbthought/yelled/criedout/saidto

2、oneself.What引导的主语从句:“What.was(that).,doingsth”读后续写 开头句衔接 读后续写第10期开头句(一个方法六大句式一学就会)1、写作思路：抓“述位”P1首句找述位核心内容 述位矛盾/特点(形容词/动宾)扩写方式：原文相关事物(尾段)+与主角互动2、六大句式场景转换：While/When/As/the momentsb1/sth.,sb2dosth 情绪+动作：“adj.+as/though+sbwas,sbdosthadj.+as/though+sbwas,sbdosth”(含转折意味)情绪+动作：“并列情绪形容词/副词，sbdosth，(独立主格:五官

3、神态)”.无灵主语句：心理情绪(无灵主语)+后半句：定从(进一步描写述位)对话/独白：“.(小短句)”sbthought/yelled/criedout/saidtooneself.What引导的主语从句:“What.was(that).,doingsth”读后续写 开头句衔接 开头句衔接：抓“述位”“主述位”理论(theme-rhemetheory)(Halliday/(theme-rhemetheory)(Halliday/韩礼德韩礼德,1994),1994)主位是句子信息的起点，它是话语的已知信息。述位是句子信息的进一步扩展，是话语的未知信息和核心内容。Para1:Afewminutes

4、later,thebearheadedbacktoourcamp.(主位)(述位)Para2:Atthatverymoment,thehelicopterarrived.(主位)(述位)引用：Halliday,M.A.K.(1994).Introductiontofunctionalgrammar.(2nded.).London:Arnold 开头句：抓“述位”(述位：句中新出现的内容/核心内容)步骤：P1P2给定句找述位(核心内容)解释述位(矛盾/特点;形容词/动宾)扩写方式：原文相关事物(尾段)+与主角互动ElliandIfearedthefencewouldntlastthrough30

5、moreminutesofthebearspunishment.ThecampmanagersuggestedIusepepperspray.Thesprayburnsthebearseyes,butdoesnthurtthem.SoIapproachedouruninvitedguestslowlyand,throughthefence,sprayedhimintheface.Withanangryroar(吼叫),thebearrantothelaketowashhiseyes.20202020年年7 7月浙江卷，尾段月浙江卷，尾段 Para 1:A few minutes later,t

6、he bear headed back to our camp.给定句找述位核心内容：thebearheadedback解释述位(矛盾/特点):angry,fierce,pushedfence原文相关事物(尾段)：spray 开头句：抓“述位”(述位：句中新出现的内容/核心内容)步骤：P1P2给定句找述位(核心内容)解释述位(矛盾/特点;形容词/动宾)扩写方式：原文相关事物(尾段)+与主角互动Para 1:A few minutes later,the bear headed back to our camp.给定句找述位/核心内容：thebearheadedback(心理/动作描写)解释述位

7、(矛盾/特点):angry,fierce,pushedfence原文相关事物(尾段)：spray推进步骤：(1)述位：熊-主要写熊(2)述位特点+解释：(心理/动作)熊愤怒/推fence-why愤怒&怎样地愤怒(看动作神态)(3)原文相关事物:熊因spray愤怒，fiercer,pushedfence；“我们”/角色分工 开头句：抓“述位”(述位：句中新出现的名词/核心内容)步骤：P1P2首句找述位(核心内容)述位矛盾/特点(形容词/动宾)扩写方式：原文相关事物(尾段)+与主角互动推进步骤：(1)述位：熊-主要写熊(2)述位特点+解释：(心理/动作)熊愤怒/推fence-why愤怒&动作神态看

8、愤怒(3)原文相关事物:熊因spray愤怒，fiercer,pushedfence；“我们”/角色分工-Seeminglyfurytookholdofthe bear,wholookedevenfiercerthenandpushedthefenceagaincrazily.(用从句/动作神态描写“述位”-“熊”)-Thenwerealizedthatthesprayhadonlyangeredhimevenmore,forheseemedmuchfiercerthistimeandviolentlypushedthefencelikemad.(取尾段的素材，与熊愤怒相关的：主要述位spray

9、、“我们”这些角色)开头句：抓“述位”(述位：句中新出现的名词/核心内容)首句衔接：P1P2述位+述位矛盾/特点+原文相关事物/与主角互动 2022022 2广州一模广州一模 Para 1:Just as I was about to start,Dad said,“Joanna,its your turn to do the dishes.”(1)P2给定句述位：Dadsaid,“.”(2)述位特点+事件：与我做作业时间冲突(3)原文相关事物:“Ihadnochoice.Ihadtogo”，类似情景/再现(尾段首句)一般：“Ifeltveryanxious”(无提及述位“爸爸说的话”)开头句

10、：抓“述位”(述位：句中新出现的名词/核心内容)首句衔接：P1P2述位+述位矛盾/特点+原文相关事物/与主角互动 2022022 2广州一模广州一模 Para 1:Just as I was about to start,Dad said,“Joanna,its your turn to do the dishes.”(1)P2给定句述位：Dadsaid,“.”(2)述位特点+事件：与我做作业时间冲突(3)原文相关事物:“Ihadnochoice.Ihadtogo”，类似情景/再现(尾段首句)一般：“Ifeltveryanxious”(无提及述位“爸爸说的话”)-改成：WhatDadremin

11、dedmeoffilledmewithenormousanxiety.接着：IknewIcouldntescapefromit,becauseev veryonewashesdishesoneryonewashesdishesonaregularbasis,whichisoneofourfamilyrules,rainorshine.aregularbasis,whichisoneofourfamilyrules,rainorshine.开头句：句式(围绕给定句核心词)句式思维：人：前半句：写述位心理情绪(无灵主语)+后半句：定从(进一步描写述位)-Furyseizedthe bear,who

12、lookedevenfiercerandpushedthefencemorecrazily.物：时间状从(时空转换):as/when/while带上述位+sbdosth+情绪形容词Oncethehelicopterlanded,wegotontoitinnotime,delighted and relieved.人/物：解释述位行为(动作神态)+非谓语/逻辑连接词(因果/目的)-Then werealizedthatthesprayhadonlyangeredhimevenmore,forheseemedmuchfiercer.开头句：句式(围绕给定句核心词)场景转换：While/When/A

13、s/the momentsb1/sth.,sb2dosth.(当.时，某人做某事)-思路：原sbdosth-改Whensth.,sbdosth(效果：场景转换，主宾语画面分离)-“登直升机”：Wegotontothehelicopter.“当直升机降落时，我们登直升机.”-Oncethehelicopterlanded,wegotontoitinnotime,excitedandrelieved.开头句：句式(围绕给定句核心词)场景转换：While/When/As/the momentsb1/sth.,sb2dosth.(当.时,某人做某事)-思路：原sbdosth-改Whensth.,sbd

14、osth(效果：场景转换，主宾语画面分离)情绪+动作：“adj.+as/though+sbwas,sbdosthadj.+as/though+sbwas,sbdosth”(倒装/让步状从，含转折意味)Exhaustedandhungryashewas,hecarriedonclimbingthemountain.Uglythoughthemanwas,heboreakindheartaspureasadiamond.情绪+动作：“并列情绪形容词/副词，sbdosth，(独立主格:五官神态).”Desperateandhopeless,Janekneltdown,tearsstreamingdo

15、wnherface.201610浙江Delightedandrelieved,wegotontothehelicopterswiftly,eyesglitteringwithhope.Reluctantly,IadmittedthatfacethatIhadnoalternativesbuttowashthedishes.happily/delightedlyangrilyfirmly/determinedlyrudelyproudlyanxiouslybravelyenviouslyenthusiasticallyunhappilygratefullyuneasily/nervouslyco

16、nfidentlysorrowfullygenerouslytiredly eagerlyfearfullypolitelydisappointedlygentlydesperately/hopelesslysincerelyregretfully/remorsefullysecretlyheavily副词合集1 happily/delightedly开心地angrily生气地firmly/determinedly坚定地rudely粗鲁地proudly骄傲地anxiously焦虑地bravely勇敢地enviously嫉妒地enthusiastically热心地，满腔热情地unhappily不

17、开心地gratefully感激地uneasily/nervously不安地confidently信心十足地sorrowfully伤心地generously慷慨地，大方地tiredly 疲倦地eagerly热切地fearfully害怕地politely礼貌地disappointedly失望地gently轻轻地，温柔地desperately/hopelessly绝望地sincerely真挚地regretfully/remorsefully后悔地secretly偷偷地heavily沉重地，缓慢而忧郁地副词合集1 confusedlycarefullycautiouslyconstantlycalml

18、ytemporarilyseriouslyviolentlydoubtfullycruellycoldlyclumsilyblanklywildly/crazilyreluctantly/unwillinglyhurriedlycasuallyunexpectedlyaimlesslyhopefullyhesitantlygraduallyimpatientlyrepeatedlydeliberatelyimmediately/swiftly副词合集2 confusedly困惑地carefully仔细地cautiously谨慎地constantly持续不断地calmly冷静地temporari

19、ly暂时地;临时地seriously严肃地violently猛烈地doubtfully怀疑地cruelly残忍地coldly/indifferently冷淡地clumsily笨拙地blankly茫然地wildly/crazily疯狂地reluctantly/unwillingly不情愿地hurriedly匆忙地casually随意地unexpectedly出乎意料地aimlessly漫无目的地hopefully满怀希望地hesitantly犹豫不决地gradually逐渐地impatiently不耐烦地repeatedly反复地deliberately故意地immediately/swiftl

20、y立即地，迅速地副词合集2 开头句：句式(围绕给定句核心词)无灵主语句：心理情绪(无灵主语)+后半句：定从(进一步描写述位)Furyseizedthe bear,wholookedevenfiercerandpushedthefencemorecrazily.Atthesight/thoughtofsth,sbdidsth.对话/独白：“.(小短句)”sbthought/yelled/shouted/criedout/saidtooneself.-接着，解释说明P1P2给定句的核心内容Para2:Atthatverymoment,the helicopterarrived.-“Thankgoo

21、dnesswearesaved!”Ellicriedout.Oncethe helicopterlanded,wegotontoitinnotime,excitedandrelieved.What引导的主语从句:“What.was(that).,doingsth”Para 1:A few minutes later,the bear headed back to our camp.”-Whatthrewusintodeeperterrorwasthebearsmoreviolentpunchingthefence,makingoursituationworsethanever.1、对比强调：I

22、t is not.thatcount/matter.Its.2、倒装句，引出结尾句：NeverhadDorareceivedsuchagift.Speechless,she.3、what 主语从句表强调：Whatmatters/countsmostis.4、呼应首段(回忆体)：Whenlookingbackonthestory,sbstillfeel.5、悟道理：Fromthis,sblearnedwhattrue+主旨名词was:道理句子6、写景：Feeling+theadj.+wind/air/sunlight+固定动词ing,sbdosth各主题升华句1、真善美-助人为乐:Rosesgi

23、ven,fragranceinhand.2、真善美-积极向上:Whenlifegivesyoulemons,makelemonade.3、真善美-个人成长:Itsnevertoolatetolearn.4、亲情主题:Familyandfriendsarehiddentreasures.5、遇险类：Whatanarrowescape!Itturnedoutthat.结尾句式 读后续写第11期结尾句(六大句式五大主题升华句)1、对比强调：It is not.thatcount/matter.Its.2、倒装句，引出结尾句：NeverhadDorareceivedsuchagift.Speechle

24、ss,she.3、what 主语从句表强调：Whatmatters/countsmostis.4、呼应首段(回忆体)：Whenlookingbackonthestory,sbstillfeel.5、悟道理：Fromthis,sblearnedwhattrue+主旨名词was:道理句子6、写景：Feeling+theadj.+wind/air/sunlight+固定动词ing,sbdosth各主题升华句1、真善美-助人为乐:Rosesgiven,fragranceinhand.2、真善美-积极向上:Whenlifegivesyoulemons,makelemonade.3、真善美-个人成长:It

25、snevertoolatetolearn.4、亲情主题:Familyandfriendsarehiddentreasures.5、遇险类：Whatanarrowescape!Itturnedoutthat.结尾写法&句式 结尾句-句式1、对比强调：句式：句首V-ing，并列结构；下句点明前者(theformer)/后者(thelatter)更重要Doing sthisnotonlyaboutdoingsthbutalsodoingsth.Andactually,what really/truly mattersisthe latter.句式:It is not.thatcount/matter

26、/makeasignificantdifference.Its.“Intheend,itsnottheyearsinyourlifethatcount.Itsthelifeinyouryears.”句式:Dont/Neverdosth.butdosth.Dontjudgeeachdaybytheharvestyoureapbutbytheseedsthatyouplant.(收获/播种)Neverbeafraidtodogood,butalwaysfeartodoevil.(永远不要害怕做好事，而要害怕做坏事)句式:强调句：Itis+名词+that+谓语(宾语)Itisloveandcaret

27、hatmatterthemostinafamilyrelationship.结尾句-句式2、倒装句，引出结尾句：倒装句，否定前置：Never had sb done sth+(下句)人物动作定格-最终结尾句：“并列形容词，sb do sth,独立主格(感官神态)”NeverhadDorareceivedsuchagift.Speechlessandhappy,sheheldhersontightlyintoherarms,withtearswellingupinhereyes.Neverhadwefallenintosuchadangerousdilemma.Delightedandrelie

28、ved,weheldeachothertightlyinarms,withtearsofecstacywellingupinoureyes.3、what主语从句表强调：Whatmatters/countsmostis.,(insteadof.)Whatittakestoconqueryourfearareactions,determinationandoptimism.结尾句-句式4、呼应首段(回忆体)：句式1：“Adv.,the+adj.+无灵主语stilllingered(beengraved)inonesmind.”(印在)(注意：adv/adj.呼应首段，与主旨情感一致)Interes

29、tingly,thefunnystorywasstilldeeplyengravedinmymind.Thefunnystorytaught us thatnevershouldwejudgeabookbyitscover.ThenarrowescapemadeMac realizehowtreasurablelifewas.Thespecialexperienceenlightenedhimthat.这段经历让他明白.句式：Whenlookingbackonthestory,sbstillfeel.Sbwouldstillfeelastrongsenseof.wheneversblooked

30、backonthe.experience.句式：“Followingthat,itgraduallydawneduponsbthat.”(sb逐渐意识到+呼应首段)结尾句-句式5、悟道理：句式：“Fromthenon,+非谓语表目的/单独的倒装句”Fromthenon,sbalwaysdosth,hopingto.Fromthenon,sbalwaysdosth.Onlyinthatway,couldsbdosth.句式：“Fromthis,sblearnedwhattrue+主旨名词was:道理句子”Fromthis,Robertlearnedwhat truecouragewas:neve

31、rbeafraidtodogood,butalwaysfeartodoevil.(从这件事中，罗伯特懂得了什么是真正的勇气：永远不要害怕做好事，而要害怕做坏事)句式：“强调句,whichwasdeeplyengravedinonesmind”(深深地刻在脑海中”)或：“Itissththat.,whichsbfeltdeepinsbsheart”Itisloveandcarethatmaketheworldgoaround,whichwasdeeplyengravedinmymind.延伸至其他主题：Itwasprocrastinationthatmademypaperafailure,whi

32、chremindedmetosetpriorities.结尾句-句式6、写景(寓情于景)：人为环境：(优先与原文故事有关联)Theirlaughterlingeredaroundthehouse.Theirlaughterechoedthroughthehouse./Thehouseechoedwithlaughterandglee.自然环境+人:(优先顺承写原文已有景物)sbdosth,with+wind/air/sunlight+固定动词ing+身体部位+副词修饰sbdosth,withthewindblowingsbshairandwhippingsbsface.sbdosth,with

33、thelightairwhisperinginsbsears.sbdosth,withthesun/sunlight/windgreetingsbgentlyandwarmly.Assbdosth,thewind/air/sunlight+固定动词+身体部位+副词修饰,固定动词2-ingAsIrun,thewindwhipsmyface,blowingmyhairback.Feeling+theadj.+wind/air/sunlight+固定动词ing,sbdosthFeelingthewarmsunlightbreakingthroughthewindow,thewholefamilyhu

34、ggedinhappiness.结尾：各主题升华句1、真善美-助人为乐Rosesgiven,fragranceinhand.(赠人玫瑰，手留余香)Youreapwhatyousow.(种瓜得瓜；善有善报)Sowthewindandreapthewhirlwind.Smallkindnesscanbringrichreward.(小小的善意可以带来丰厚的回报)Smallactcanbring/contributeto/giverisetoabigdifference.Asmallact/gestureofkindnesswillperhapsmelt/cureonesloneliness.The

35、smallestactofkindnessisworthmorethanthegrandestintention.(王尔德)Neverunderestimatethepower/valueofouractions(toliftpeopleup).Noactofkindness,nomatterhowsmall,iseverwasted.Themiracleisthis:themorewesharethemorewehave.各主题结尾升华句2、真善美-积极向上Whenlifegivesyoulemons,makelemonade.Tochangetheworstsituationintobes

36、t,oneshouldtakeactions.“Neverlose.Ieitherwinorlearn”-NelsonMandelaAdversity/Setbacksinlifeiseitherablessingindisguiseorafruitfullesson.Yourcurrentsituationisnotyourfinaldestination.Bepatient,trustthetimingandenjoythejourney.Itisbettertolightacandlethantocursethedarkness.Lifewithoutdreamsislikeabirdw

37、ithabrokenwing.各主题结尾升华句3、真善美-个人成长Wherethereisawill,thereisaway.(有志者事竟成)Itsnevertoolatetolearn.Everyindividualissupposedtoacceptmorechallengesandmakemoreattempts.Actually,eachindividualpossessestalent.Bebrave,risetosetbacks/obstacles,andmakeefforts.Youwillendupcreatingmiracles.(直面困难/努力/终将制造奇迹)Seizeth

38、eday,andchaseyourdreams.Aslongasyougraspeveryopprtunityandtakefulladvantageofit,youwillstandachancetorealizeyourdreams.Thejourneytosuccessisnotsmooth.Itisfullofchallengesanddifficulties.Ifyougetdisheartenedordiscouragedbythesehurdles,youcannotattainsuccess.各主题结尾升华句4、亲情主题Familyandfriendsarehiddentrea

39、sures.Family,awonderfulshelteranda24-hourharbor,isalwaysthereforus.Familyloveisthegreatestgiftinlife.Familyistouswhatharboristoships.(家庭之于我们就像港口之于船只)“Familyisalifejacketinthestormyseaoflife.”J.K.RowlingFamiliesarethecompassthatguidesus.Family:wherelifebeginsandloveneverends.各主题结尾升华句5、遇险类Whatanarrowe

40、scape!Itturnedoutthatthereisalwaysawayoutofanydifficultsituationsaslongaswestaycalm.NeverhadIfallenintosuchadangeroussituation.Theexperiencewasdeeplyengravedinmymindandremindedmetorespectthenature.Evenyouaresufferingfromthedarkestmoment,youshouldfocustoseekthelight.OnlythendidIrealizethatactionscanc

41、urefearandbraverycanconquerdifficulties.Nevershouldwegiveupourhopewhateversetbackswearefacedwith.小说结尾句赏析：(The Little Prince)AndthatishowImadetheacquaintanceofthelittleprince.Chapter2Itissuchasecretplace,thelandoftears.Chapter7(仿写：Itwassuchaninspiringexperience,alessonabouthonesty.)Thegrown-upsarecer

42、tainlyaltogetherextraordinary,hesaidsimply,talkingtohimselfas hecontinuedonhisjourney.Chapter13Whatthelittleprincedidnotdareconfesswasthathewassorrymostofalltoleavethisplanet,becauseitwasblesteverydaywith1440sunsets!(每天有1440次日落，真是太幸福了！)Chapter14Andthelittleprincewentaway,thinkingofhisflower.Chapter1

43、5 小说结尾句赏析：(The Little Prince)Iamresponsibleformyrose,thelittleprincerepeated,sothathewouldbesuretoremember.Chapter21Onerunstheriskofweepingalittle,ifoneletshimselfbetamed.(如果被人驯服了，就要承担哭泣的风险)Chapter25And,asIwalkedonso,Ifoundthewell,atdaybreak.Chapter24Whatmovesmesodeeply,aboutthislittleprincewhoissleepinghere,ishisloyaltytoaflower-theimageofarosethatshinesthroughhiswholebeingliketheflameofalamp,evenwhenheisasleep.(使我非常感动的，是小王子对他那朵花的忠诚。这朵玫瑰花，即使在小王子睡着了的时候，也象一盏灯的火焰一样在他身上闪耀着光辉)