基于主题伏笔的读后续写公开课课件-2023届高三英语一轮复习(1).pptx

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1、高三一轮复习之读后续写讲评我的第一次现场直播普宁二实学校-2023届 高三英语组 周芳 2022.10.201读后续写“三步走”1.：原文阅读+信息梳理 读懂情节+体会语言+理清线索2.：潜心构思+情节预设+明确方向 关注“两线”-情节线&情感线 关注“四点”-四处衔接3.：初稿勾勒+润色提升+工整誊写负正2读后续写评分标准评分档次第一项第二项第三项第四项第五档(21-25分)与所给短文融洽度高，与所提供各段落开头语衔接合理。内容丰富所使用语法结构和词汇丰富、准确，可能有些许错误，但完全不影响意义的表达。有效地使用了语句间的连接成分，使所续写短文结构紧凑。第四档(16-20分)与所给短文融洽度

2、较高，与所提供各段落开头语衔接较合理。内容比较丰富所使用语法结构和词汇较为丰富准确，可能有些许错误，但完全不影响意义的表达。有效地使用了语句间的连接成分，使所续写短文结构紧凑。内容构思语言表达内容构思语言表达情境不合理,脱离真实生活 内容构思不准确是分数无法提高的重要原因之一续写与原文脱节融洽度不高,衔接不合理段落分布不均衡续写情节不丰富主题升华牵强或跑偏内容出问题根源原文:读不懂读不透从而抓不住本质3本节课目标-读后续写的内容构造1.复习读后续写四衔接2.学会精读文章,巧妙构思合理丰富、与原文融洽度高的情节3.学会正确升华主题“读读”后续后续“写写”-“读读”为为“写写”之先之先读出原故事的

3、六要素读出原故事的六要素 （抓住原故事的主题和重点）（抓住原故事的主题和重点）1.读读_主要情节，确定主要情节，确定_；2.读读清清_，_故事发展；故事发展；3.读读透透_，_故事情节；故事情节；4.读读准准_，_故事表达。故事表达。懂故事走向段落首句 调整人物性格细化语言特点 丰富内容构思（1）边读边想象场景，在大脑屮勾勒出画面，为下一步的情景创设做好铺垫。(自我代入,做个”戏精”)（2）边读边用中文把主要情节写下来。特别注意明线(情节发展)和暗线(情绪变化),总结人物性格。（3）主要情节即“记叙文六要素”：人物、时间、地点、起因、经过、结果（谁在什么时间、什么地方，因为什么、做了什么、最终

4、怎样。)读读之三步骤之三步骤01原文一致原则原文一致原则内容要内容要前后衔接前后衔接，上下连贯上下连贯语言表达语言表达风格一致风格一致。03曲折性原则曲折性原则故事故事情节情节应应跌宕跌宕起伏起伏，其中人物会遇到困难或其中人物会遇到困难或问题，但问题，但最最终能解决终能解决。02正能量原则正能量原则故事内容一定要故事内容一定要正能量正能量，弘扬社会主义，弘扬社会主义核心价值观。如迷路了但最终一定核心价值观。如迷路了但最终一定回到了家；失败了或遇到困难了，但回到了家；失败了或遇到困难了，但最终一定成功了；吵架了但最后一定最终一定成功了；吵架了但最后一定是言归于好是言归于好,和睦相处和睦相处；犯错

5、了，最后一定会改过自新，重新做人；贼逃了，最后一定犯错了，最后一定会改过自新，重新做人；贼逃了，最后一定是绳之以法是绳之以法等等。等等。三原则构之三原则I arrived at the studio on the appointed day.When Mr.Slaight took me around,he looked at me and said,“What do you want?”He sounded furious(狂怒的)but curious.“All I want is a chance to audition(试镜).I just want you to know my fa

6、ce.Thats all Im asking.”I didnt know whether Id ever hear from him again,but two weeks later,his secretary called,“Mr.Slight wants to know if youd like to come and audition for a new school life show.”I immediately answered,“Sure!”Paragraph 1:When I arrived at the station(电视台电视台),I went direct into

7、the audition and began my short performance.Paragraph 2:Finally came the day of my first public appearance on live TV with my parents at home watching.仔细研读所给两首句;暗示情节走向 live 现场直播的我的感受?我的直播情况?观众反应?主题升华?Para.1 我的表现如何?被录取了吗?什么 感受?公开直播前的准备?Step1:两段首句定一框(段一)二框二首正能量 -搭建两段大致框架Step2:回归原文,确定走向;丰富情节I had a dre

8、am from primary school:to work in television.My parents owned a little grocery store,so we were definitely not fancy people(我们绝对不是上流社会的人).Thankfully,my dad had raised me to have a lot of confidence.He often said,You can do anything you want to do.My dad was particularly supportive.He was my steady r

9、ock-always there for me.With his help and encouragement,I was admitted to the radio and television arts program at Ryerson in Toronto.I really loved the program and worked hard and I was named the most outstanding graduate.I felt like I was already living my dream.I began to think that maybe I could

10、 apply for an internship(实习资格)in CBC or CTV.Continuation writing明线:Para.1 小学我的梦想-电视台工作;父亲支持鼓励我;明线:Para.2 有父亲鼓励支持;我进入大学广播电视专业;我很优秀暗线1:confident人物性格:persistent/perseverant锲而不舍的Luckily,Global Television had just started broadcasting in Canada that year.I thought to myself:Im new and theyre new,so if Im

11、 going to get to know one person at Global,it might as well be the president.I was scared,but I knew deep down inside that this was what I wanted.When I called my dad and told him my plan,he said,“Good,Faye.Thats exactly what you should do.”With my heart just about pounding out of my body,I called u

12、p the president of Global Television.Suddenly Mr.Slaight was on the phone.“Ive heard that your studio facilities are amazing.I could come at eleven oclock on Monday or eleven oclock on Sunday for a tour.What would suit you better?”I caught him totally off guard.He stuttered a bit,and then picked a d

13、ay.When I hung up,I was scared but excited.明线:Para.3 环球电台在加始播见大佬想去实习电问老爸老爸支持明线:Para.4 目标明确-预约大佬预约成功 暗线2.scared but eager性格2:determined暗线3.scared,nervous but daring无畏的性格3:bold大胆自信的暗线4.scared but excitedI arrived at the studio on the appointed day.When Mr.Slaight took me around,he looked at me and sai

14、d,“What do you want?”He sounded furious(狂怒的)but curious.“All I want is a chance to audition(试镜).I just want you to know my face.Thats all Im asking.”I didnt know whether Id ever hear from him again,but two weeks later,his secretary called,“Mr.Slight wants to know if youd like to come and audition fo

15、r a new school life show.”I immediately answered,“Sure!”Paragraph 1:When I arrived at the station(电视台电视台),I went direct into the audition and began my short performance.Paragraph 2:Finally came the day of my first public appearance on live TV with my parents at home watching.明线:Para.5 见到大佬;毫不胆怯;自荐试镜

16、Para.6 获得机会-试镜新节目暗线5.confident and daring性格4:bold大胆自信的暗线6.excited and hopeful性格5:confident自信的暗线7.confident暗线8.nervous but proud and excitedPara.1 小学我的梦想-电视台工作;父亲支持鼓励我;Para.2 有父亲鼓励支持;我进入大学广播电视专业;我很优秀Para.3 环球电台在加始播见大佬想去实习电问老爸老爸支持Para.4 目标明确-预约大佬大佬预约成功 Para.5 见到大佬;毫不胆怯;自荐试镜Para.6 获得机会-试镜新节目情节:时间线 续1:我

17、一到电视台,直奔试镜 续2:第一次亮相公开直播,父母观看 理清时间线,有助于情境的设定Para.1 小学我的梦想-电视台工作;父亲支持鼓励我;Para.2 有父亲鼓励支持;我进入大学广播电视专业;我很优秀Para.3 环球电台在加始播见大佬想去实习电问老爸老爸支持Para.4 目标明确-预约大佬大佬预约成功 Para.5 见到大佬;毫不胆怯;自荐试镜Para.6 获得机会-试镜新节目 续1:我一到电视台,直奔试镜 续2:第一次亮相公开直播,父母观看 暗线1:confident暗线2.scared but eager暗线3.scared,nervous but daring无畏的暗线4.scar

18、ed but excited暗线5.confident and daring暗线6.excited and hopeful暗线7.confident暗线8.nervous but proud and excited适时加入危机冲突,推动情节合理发展,升华主题感情线人物性格:persistent/perseverant锲而不舍的性格2:determined性格3:bold大胆自信的理清感情线,续写的主人公情感变化不突兀理清人物性格,有助于构造合理合逻辑的情节我们的情节构思我们的构思依据Para.1我到达电台,直奔试镜Para.2几天后我直播亮相,父母观看试镜表现:我虽有点小紧张,但还是完美地完成

19、了试镜自信;优秀学生;专业毕业;2段首句直播亮相被录用电视台实习;参与新节目直播亮相;P2实习 Para.6 试镜新校园生活节目梦想成真;兴奋激动;和父母分享喜讯;父亲祝贺期待和鼓励P1我的梦想 P123 凡大事必与父母商量 为不负期望;精心准备直播2段首句:直播的那一天到来了衔接一:衔接二:Para.1 我的表现如何?公开直播前的准备?Group work(5 minutes)我的直播如何?观众反应?主题升华?负正Individual work(5 minutes)我们的情节构思我们的构思依据Para.1我到达电台,直奔试镜Para.2第一次亮相公开直播,父母观看 试镜表现:我虽有点小紧张,

20、但还是完美地完成了试镜自信;优秀学生;专业毕业;2段首句直播亮相被录用电视台实习;参与新节目直播亮相;P2实习;Para.6 试镜新校园生活节目梦想成真;兴奋激动;和父母分享喜讯;父亲祝贺期待和鼓励P1我的梦想 P123 凡大事必与父母商量 为不负众望;精心准备直播2段首句:直播的那一天到来了衔接一:衔接二:自我感觉准备充分,自信大步走上舞台衔接三:公开直播!直播前精心准备直播中:负转正可安排-直播过程中设置合理的小矛盾-结合常识-最终合理化解小插曲(老规矩:每逢大事找老爸)第一次见这么多观众;忽而紧张忘词想起老父亲,给予动力;找回状态;直播顺利完成,赢得在场观众喝彩感悟+主题升华文章主题是?

21、衔接四:两段内容与原文的衔接记叙文续1 梦想成真;兴奋激动;和父母分享喜讯;父亲祝贺期待与鼓励续2 想起老父亲,给予动力;找回状态;直播完成我的成长都与父有关主题构造亲情(父爱)促成长我们的情节构思我们的构思依据Para.1我到达电台,直奔试镜Para.2第一次亮相公开直播,父母观看 试镜表现:我虽有点小紧张,但还是完美地完成了试镜自信;优秀学生;专业毕业;2段首句直播亮相被录用电视台实习;参与新节目直播亮相;P2实习;Para.6 试镜新校园生活节目梦想成真;兴奋激动;和父母分享喜讯;父亲祝贺期待和鼓励P1我的梦想 P123 凡大事必与父母商量 为不负众望;精心准备直播2段首句:直播的那一天

22、到来了衔接一:衔接二:自我感觉准备充分,自信大步走上舞台衔接三:公开直播!直播前精心准备直播中:负转正可安排-直播过程中设置合理的小矛盾-结合常识-最终合理化解小插曲(老规矩:每逢大事找老爸)第一次见这么多观众;忽而紧张忘词想起老父亲,给予动力;找回状态;直播顺利完成,赢得在场观众喝彩感悟+主题升华多幸运有父亲的支持与爱伴我成长,实现梦想衔接四:两段内容与原文的衔接Paragraph1 When I arrived at the station,I went direct into the audition and began my short performance.Nervous as I

23、 was,I clearly feel it in my bones that the audition was sure to be a success.Standing there,even without turning an eyelash,I finished the performance smoothly.As I had expected,the intern job,a school life show,was assigned to me.There would be my first public appearance on TV in five days.Hearing

24、 the thrilling news,my parents were overflowing with happiness and couldnt wait to watch my performance.To live up to their expectations,I worked around the clock,trying to give a perfect performance.Finally came the day of my first public appearance on live TV with my parents at home watching.衔接一:衔

25、接二 feel it in my bones我有预感 without turning an eyelash 泰然自若 worked around the clock日以继夜地工作 be overflowing with happiness 洋溢着幸福 Paragraph 2 Finally came the day of my first public appearance on live TV with my parents at home watching.Feeling fully prepared,with eyes shining and head up high,I strode

26、onto the stage.Seeing so many audience sitting in neat rows,I felt extremely proud but instantly it was replaced by a flood of tension.My palms sweating and my legs trembling,my mind went blank almost at once.It seemed that I totally forgot my lines.“You can do anything you want to do.”a voice ringi

27、ng in my ears,picturing my father smile a little smile,I felt myself again and made up for the clumsy moment with a joke.As a thunder of applause split the air,the show ended perfectly.At that moment,I felt really blessed that my fathers love,support and encouragement were always showered on me and led me to achieve my dream step by step.衔接三主题:父爱促成长 stride into 大步流星;大步走5反思总结完成学案中的反思总结1、2和3 1.如何确定两段框架2.如何在框架下丰富文章内容,确定主题?3.本节课我的收获?还有何疑问?6Assignment 请使用本节课所学知识对东华卷读后续写进行同桌互评注意内容构造中是否存在以下问题:*文章理解不到位，续写情节与原文脱离。*情节没有得以展开，体现不出丰富新颖。*所创设的情境违背真实生活，缺乏合理性。*融洽度不高，衔接不合理。*大量对话无意义，段落间分布不均衡。*主题升华牵强或跑偏。