读后续写： 兼职的少女走调的钢琴 讲义--2023届高三英语三轮冲刺.docx

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1、读后续写：兼职的少女，走调的钢琴讲义续写题目Many years earlier, my mother knew that she could not send me to college and pay for it. She worked in a retail store and made just enough to pay the bills and take care of the other children at home. If I wanted to go to college, it was up to me to find out how to get there.I

2、found that I qualified for some grants because of the size of our family, my moms income and my SAT scores. There was enough to cover school and books, but not enough for room and board. I accepted a job as part of a work-study program. While not attractive, it was one I could do. I washed dishes in

3、 the school cafeteria.Just when I thought I was going to drop out of my college career, an angel appeared. Well, one of those that are on earth, without wings. /ZI heard that you need some help,“ he said. nWhat do you mean?” I asked, trying to figure out which area of my life he meant. Financially,

4、to stay in school.” Well, I make it okay. I just have trouble working all these hours and finding time to study. Well, I think I have a way to help you out.He went on to explain that his grandparents needed help on the weekends. All that was required of me was cooking meals and helping them get in a

5、nd out of bed in the morning and evening. The job paid four hundred dollars a month, twice the money I was making washing dishes. Now I would have time to study. I went to meet his grandparents and accepted the job.My first discovery was his grandmothers great love of music. She spent hours playing

6、her old, off-key piano. One day, she told me I didnt have enough fun in my life and took it upon herself to teach me the art. Grandma was impressed with my ability and encouraged me to continue. Weekends in their house became more than just books and cooking, they were filled with the wonderful soun

7、ds of the out-of-tune piano and two very out-of-tune singers.Paragraph 1When Christmas break came, Grandma got a chest cold, and I was afraid to leave her.Paragraph 2The envelope was from grandma who had just passed a way.续写答案Paragraph 1When Christmas break came. Grandma got a chest cold, and I was

8、afraid to leave her.So, I decided to pay her a visit. The angel answered the door and led me to her bedroom where a small gaunt figure with furrowed brows lay quietly on the bed. My heart twitched. Hearing us, Grandma opened her eyes. Honey, happy holidays! Have you packed?, she smiled weakly. I cam

9、e closer and held her hand, I want to be with you, Grandma.She patted my hand gently, Dont worry dear. Your family must miss you. Go. I promise Ill see you soon. She lied. When I received that soul-crushing phone call, suddenly, the world seemed to have lost its color until a letter found our door.P

10、aragraph 2The envelope was from grandma who had just passed away.In it, she told me how proud she was of me and how much she loved me.Her words were like a warm embrace that enveloped me in love and comfort. As I read the letter, I could hear the sound of the old piano in the background. It was out

11、of tune, but it didnt matter for it was a reminder of all the wonderful times we had spent together. In a split second, I thought I saw, through my blurry eyes, Grandma sitting at the piano, her fingers moving gracefully over the keys. Then, she looked up at me and smiled. At that moment I knew, in

12、her own way, Grandma had kept her promise.续写精析The angel“ answered the door and led me to her bedroom where a small gaunt figure with furrowed brows lay quietly on the bed.”Angel应门，呼应原文称呼，衔接上句逻辑，然后紧接着把主角引到grandma 的房间中。关系副词where引导的定语从句说明房间内的情况。a small gaunt figure with furrowed brows lay quietly on th

13、e bed.这句话用了 4处细节体现出grandma此刻的状态。small & gaunt ,病痛折磨下的祖母显得，身材弱小而面容瘦削。gaunt：牛 津 vry thin, usually bcausa of illnss.With furrowed brows眉头紧锁，暗示grandma胸痛的严重，无时不刻都 在疼着，所以眉关难以抚平。Lay quietly祖母很喜欢弹钢琴，但此刻她却安静地躺在床上，进一步让读者 感知grandma的状态。My heart twitched.twitch：牛津 if a part of your body twitchesz or if you twitc

14、h it, it makes a sudden quick movementz sometimes one that you cannot control痉挛；抽搐；抽动进入房间，看到病卧的祖母，身形消瘦，眉头紧锁，主角的心不由自主地抽动， 祖孙感情之深，一词足矣。Hearing us. Grandma opened her eyes. Honey, happy holidays! Have you packed?, she smiled weakly.Grandma这个人物我是偏爱的。正如原文中所塑造，我希望续写中能体现出她坚毅、善良、理解和睿智。尽管续 写第二段提示，grandma已然离主

15、角远去，但我希望她生前身后，都能像一束温暖的 光一样。所以，我的第一段，grandma听到动静醒过来，看到主角，虚弱的微笑着。虽然 自己已经病重，但言语中则是对后辈的关切，节日快乐孩子，东西收拾好了吗？I came closer and held her hand, “I want to be with you. Grandma.”人物互动，视角流转自然。我看到grandma的情况，听到她的关心，上前握住了她的手。这个握手的动作，手的温度，温暖的是彼此的心。She patted my hand gently, Dont worry dear. Your family must miss you

16、. Go. I promise ril see you soon.先握手，才能后拍手。逻辑完美，且动作进一步丰满人物形象。别担心孩子，你的家人肯定很想你。回吧，我保证我们很快就能见面。Grandma知道孩子心理纠结，故而温和地解开心结。grandma知道自己时日无 多，但依然承诺与孩子他日相逢，给孩子希望。这是何等的爱，何等的情。She lied.一句话，两个词，读者已心领神会。至深的情感，至诚的触动，至简的表达。她说谎了。当一个人离开，很多时候，我们不会去思考这整件事的影响，不会听别人说，节 哀顺变，而是紧紧揪住他没有说完的那句话，没有看成的那场电影，没能成行的那个 旅程。自然也包括她没有信

17、守的那个承诺。这一刻，爱以一种矛盾的方式体现。嘴上全是数落，却心如刀割。When I received that soul-crushing phone call, suddenly, the world seemed to have lost its color until a letter found our door.最后一句衔接第二段，须交待出信的来处。我接到那通把我心脏绞碎的电话时，一瞬间，世界似乎失去了光彩，直到那封信 找到我家门前。那通电话，一封信。这件最伤心的事不需要宣诸于口，但主角的反应已经告知了一切。In it, she told me how proud she was

18、of me and how much she loved me.读者自然会好奇，书信里写了什么，所以首句先说明信的内容。通过概括书信的情感，避免引用具体文字可能引发的繁冗。这段话后面没有一句提信中具体说了什么，但句句都在说信给主角带来的情感冲 击和体验，所以，又是否句句都在说信呢？Her words were like a warm embrace that enveloped me in love and comfort第二段剧情中只有主角一人，但这不意味着续写中不能展现互动性。互动性包括人与人的互动，也包括人与环境的互动。此刻主角展开信件阅读，那么自然就和信件产生了互动。此时，她的话如温暖

19、的拥抱一样用爱和抚慰将我包围。As I read the letter, I could hear the sound of the old piano in the background.此时，主角阅读中，心灵已经进入一重妙境，灵魂好似从实体空间中抽离，浮入 由文字和记忆交织的海洋。在这里，可以听到钢琴的声音。It was out of tune, but it didn ft matter for it was a reminder of all the wonderful times we had spent together.那钢琴的声音有些走调，但它正该走调。悠扬的琴声让我想起了在g

20、randma家度过的一个个欢快的周末。这句话其实还有一重巧思。句中说的是琴声让我想起了过去的时光，但脑海中的琴声由文字激发，其实也在 侧面说明信中祖母回忆了两人共同经历的美好岁月。In a split second, I thought I saw, through my blurry eyes. Grandma sitting at the piano, her fingers moving gracefully over the keys. Then, she looked up at me and smiled.这个瞬间，就如同一场异常迷人的幻梦，可遇而不可求。在主角阅读书信时，泪水打湿

21、眼眶，迷离的视线沟通了现实与想象，此身与彼岸。恍惚间，我似乎看到祖母坐在钢琴前，手指于琴键上飞舞，然后她抬起头来看 着我笑了。这是我到目前写过最催泪的画面。A t that moment I knew, in her own way, she kept her promise.结尾要为这场幻梦，为这个故事画上句点，我希望读者读完能收获一种温暖的力 量。因此，在第一段我为结尾埋下了伏笔。首段中，祖母曾对主角说这样一句话，Dont worry dear. Your family must miss you. Go. I promise HI see you soon.”当主角得知grandma的讯息，她的反应是she lied.伤心难抑。但当主角读完这封信，看到祖母的微笑，那一刻，我明白，以她独特的方式, 祖母信守了自己的诺言。祖母不辞而别引发的那种心有不甘的苦痛，那种此生难忘的遗憾，在此刻被一一 抚平。