话题写作 Learn to Be Grateful.ppt

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1、课型：话题写作课课型：话题写作课授课教师：东莞市望牛墩中学授课教师：东莞市望牛墩中学 李小丽李小丽九年级写作研讨九年级写作研讨1.Learn to describe one event;2.Learn to express gratitude(感恩之情感恩之情);3.Enable to write a passage and grade it with the standard;4.Learn to be grateful and keep positive (乐观乐观);Learning Objectan eventWhen:Last Sunday morningWhere:a superm

2、arket Who:I;a boy What:lost my wallet;gave back Feeling:ThankfulLast Sunday morning,I went shopping in a _.Unluckily,I lost my _.I felt worried.Later,a boy came to me and _ my wallet.I was very _ to him.an eventWhen:Last Monday evening;rainy Where:in the classroomWho:I;my classmate Lucy What:had to

3、stay in the classroom;lent me an umbrellaFeeling:warm and movedLast Monday evening,it was _ when the class was over.I had to _ because I had no umbrella.suddenly,my classmate Lucy _.At that time,I felt _.WhenWhowhereWhatFeelingKey 1:抓住抓住“W+F”要点要点Key 2:叙述事件使用叙述事件使用_时态时态一般过去一般过去WhenWhowhereWhatFeeling

4、请描述一件你得到帮助的事件请描述一件你得到帮助的事件1.Last month,I failed my math exam and cried.After seeing this,my math teacher encouraged me and helped me with my study after school every day.With his help,I did well in the next exam.I felt very happy.2.Last Friday,I fell down from stairs when I went up.My legs hurt badl

5、y.Luckily,my friend Tony came by and sent me to the hospital at once.I felt thankful.In everyday life,we often get help from other people.What can you do to express your gratitude(感恩之情感恩之情)?1.Discuss and finish the mind-map with key words;2.Write at least 3 ways each group;(格式：格式：ways+reason/result)

6、Ways to express my gratitudeExample:I can,because/so that I should/I mayYou can report like this:To express my gratitude,I can do something.Firstly,I can Secondly,Thirdly,1.I can make a card for him and write on the card:Thank you,my dear teacher!2.I should write a thank-you letter to her and tell h

7、er how much I want to thank her.3.I think the best way is to study harder and make progress every day.4.Why not be ready to help people in need?To express my gratitude,I can do something.Firstly,I can Secondly,Thirdly,Ways to express my gratitudewrite a thank-you letterstudy harder and get good grad

8、esbuy a giftKey 1:How to express your gratitude:I can do something to express my gratitude.Firstly,I can Secondly,Thirdly,Key 2:合理使用连接词，表达观点更清晰合理使用连接词，表达观点更清晰:1.1.第一第一,第二第二,第三第三2.2.一方面一方面另一方面另一方面3.3.此外此外,而且而且,还有还有4.4.总而言之总而言之First,Second,ThirdOn the one hand;on the other handWhats more;BesidesAll in

9、 all;In a word 我们每个人在生活、学习或各种活动中得到过周边我们每个人在生活、学习或各种活动中得到过周边人的帮助，我们应该学会感恩。我校文学社正在举办人的帮助，我们应该学会感恩。我校文学社正在举办主题为主题为“用行动表达感恩用行动表达感恩”的征文活动，请你根据下的征文活动，请你根据下面提供的信息，写一篇面提供的信息，写一篇8080词左右的英语短文。词左右的英语短文。内容包括：内容包括：1.1.你最想感谢谁？描述一件你得到帮助的事件；你最想感谢谁？描述一件你得到帮助的事件；2.2.你想如何用行动表达感恩？你想如何用行动表达感恩？(至少两点至少两点)；3.3.呼吁大家学会感恩，让世界

10、充满爱。呼吁大家学会感恩，让世界充满爱。内容包括：内容包括：1.1.你最想感谢谁？描述一件你得到帮助的事件；你最想感谢谁？描述一件你得到帮助的事件；2.2.你想如何用行动表达感恩？你想如何用行动表达感恩？(至少两点至少两点)；3.3.呼吁大家学会感恩，让世界充满爱。呼吁大家学会感恩，让世界充满爱。1.感谢谁？描写一件事感谢谁？描写一件事(when,who,where,what,feeling)(一般过去时一般过去时)2.如何表达感恩如何表达感恩(两点两点)？3.呼吁呼吁1 1圈圈列列定定分分15分分=内容内容8分分+语言语言6分分+字数字数1分分1分分3分分3分分1分分在在A、B、C中，选择中

11、，选择自己想挑战的一篇写自己想挑战的一篇写作，并把它完成。作，并把它完成。10 min4 4 写写 初初 稿稿记得分段哦！记得分段哦！检查：检查：1.内容内容是否写全；是否写全；2.连词连词是否合理使用；是否合理使用；3.单词单词拼写；拼写；4.语法语法结构；结构；5 5 修修 错错 误误 Here I would like to express my thanks to my math teacher.(感恩感恩谁谁:1分分)Last month,I failed my math exam and cried.After seeing this,my math teacher encoura

12、ged me and helped me with my study after school every day.With his help,I did well in the next exam.I felt very happy.(一件事一件事:3分分)To express my gratitude,I can do something.Firstly,I can make a card for him and write on the card:Thank you,my dear teacher!Secondly,I think the best way to express my g

13、ratitude is to study harder and make progress every day.(如何表达如何表达:3分分)In a word,lets learn to be grateful in life and make the world full of love.(呼吁呼吁:1分分)写作高分技巧：写作高分技巧：1.1.合理使用主题句合理使用主题句，让层次更分明；，让层次更分明；2.2.恰当使用过渡词恰当使用过渡词(So,But,However,In a word)和连接词和连接词(Firstly,Secondly,And,Then,Finally)；内容内容(8)语

14、言语言逻辑逻辑(6)字数字数/书面书面(1)(1)1.最想感谢谁最想感谢谁 (1分分)错误错误扣分扣分不够不够4040词扣词扣1 1分分40-6040-60词词扣扣0.50.5分分2.描写一件你得到帮助描写一件你得到帮助的事件的事件(3分分)33个个0-10-14-104-10个个1.5-31.5-33.3.如何用行动表达感恩如何用行动表达感恩的的?(?(至少两点至少两点)(3(3分分)11-1611-16个个3.5-53.5-54.4.呼吁大家学会感恩，呼吁大家学会感恩，让世界充满爱让世界充满爱 (1(1分分)1616以上以上5.5-65.5-6得分：得分：Total(总分总分15)：Gra

15、ding standard(评分标准评分标准)1515分分=内容内容8 8分分 +语言语言6 6分分 +字数字数/书面书面1 1分分 Here I would like to express my thanks to.Last Monday evening,it was rainy when the class was over.I have to stay in the classroom because I had no umbrella.suddenly,my classmate Lucy lend me an umbrella.At that time,I felt warm and

16、moving.To express my gratitude,I can do something.Firstly,I can write a thank-you letter to Lucy.Secondly,I should help people in need,just like Lucy helped me.In a word,lets learn to be grateful in life and make the world full of love.少感恩谁少感恩谁:-1:-1语法错误语法错误:-1:-11515分分=内容内容8 8分分 +语言语言6 6分分 +字数字数/书面

17、书面1 1分分 Here I would like to express my thanks to.Last Monday night,I have a fever.My mother is worried.She take me to see a doctor and look after me all the night.I feel warm.To express my gratitude,I can buy some flowers and say thank you.All in all,lets learn to be grateful in life and make the w

18、orld full of love.少少1 1个做法个做法:-1.5:-1.5语法错误语法错误:-2:-2字数字数:-0.5:-0.5少感恩谁少感恩谁:-1:-1Exchange your writing with your partner (同伴互评同伴互评)1.How to describe one event:WhenWhowhereWhatFeelingKey 1:抓住抓住“W+F”要点要点Key 2:叙述事件使用叙述事件使用_时态时态一般过去一般过去Key1:Key1:合理使用连接词，表达观点更清晰合理使用连接词，表达观点更清晰;Key2:Key2:写作高分技巧：写作高分技巧：1.1

19、.合理使用主题句合理使用主题句,让层次更分明；让层次更分明；2.2.恰当使用过渡词恰当使用过渡词(So,But,However,In a word)和连接词和连接词(Firstly,Secondly,And,Then,Finally)；2.How to express your opinion:3.How to write a good article:a)Steps 写作五步曲：写作五步曲：圈圈要点要点列列提纲提纲 定定分分数数写写初稿初稿修修错误错误1 1圈圈2 2列列3 3分分4 4写写5 5修修1515分分=内容内容8 8分分 +语言语言6 6分分 +字数字数/书面书面1 1分分b)S

20、tructure 作文结构作文结构:event(事事件件)opinion(观点观点)hope(总总结结)让我们感谢那些让我们快乐的人吧；让我们感谢那些让我们快乐的人吧；他们是让我们的灵魂如鲜花般绽放的他们是让我们的灵魂如鲜花般绽放的可爱园丁。可爱园丁。（马塞尔（马塞尔.普鲁斯特）普鲁斯特）1.What have you learnt in this lesson?2.What do you think of your study in class?1.Finish writing;2.Get your partner to mark your writing;3.Correct the mistakes in your writing;