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1、Continuation Writing读后续写讲评课考情分析1.能基本读懂故事，2.对原文分析不够具体到位3.写作句式简单，描写生硬教学目标1.通过故事山分析原文本的基本框架，分析出故事要素（人物，时间，地点，事件），分析出人物关系，环境，情节发展，并作出合理预测。2.通过搭建脚手架，提供语料，使学生能够用正确合适的语言合理续写故事。如何如何如何如何构思续写的内容构思续写的内容构思续写的内容构思续写的内容Step 1 Figure out the elementsStep 2 Figure out the plotsStep 3 Figure out the main ideaStep 4

2、Make predictions Through our lives,we can gain a lot and lose so much.But being honest should always be with us,as honesty is always regarded as a virtue.Every time I talk about the topic,something crowds in my mind as if it had just happened.I was 16 when one morning,Dad told me I could drive him t

3、o Mijas and then take the car in a nearby garage to get it serviced.At that time,I had just passed the driving test,and I hardly had a chance to use the car,so I said yes without hesitation.I drove my father to Mijas,promising to pick him up again at 4 pm,then I went to a nearby garage,and put the c

4、ar in there.Since I had several hours to spare,I decided to go to a movie theater near the garage to see the movie.However,I was so absorbed in the plot of the movie that I forgot the time.When the last movie finished,I looked at my watch：6 pm.I was two hours late!I thought my father would be very a

5、ngry if he knew what I was doing.And he would never let me drive again.So I decided to make up an excuse.Then,I drove to the appointed place,my father was sitting in a corner,waiting patiently.I first apologized for being late,then told him that I wanted to get there as soon as possible,but that som

6、ething was wrong with some of the main parts of the car.I would never forget the way he looked at me.“Im very disappointed that you thought you had to lie to me,Jason.”My father looked at me again and said,“When you didnt show up on time,I called the gas station and asked if there was anything wrong

7、.They told me you never picked up the car.So,you see,I know theres nothing wrong with the car at all.Paragaph1:A wave of guilt swept over me and I had to admit the fact that I had gone to the movies and that was the real reason why I was late._ Paragraph 2：But father,its exactly eighteen miles home

8、from here,and its dark.You cant walk back.I begged._阅读分析与续写的框架主题语境：人与社会亲情Theme:作者驾车去接他的父亲，但是他因为去看电影而耽误了时间后，他谎称去修车了，最后谎言被拆穿了，这使得父亲非常生气。Purpose:通过这次说谎的经历，体现了诚实点重要性。Development:刚拿驾照，父亲允许开车-沉迷电影，忘记时间-匆忙赶到，并说谎-父亲生气Structure:每段8句左右，长短句交错，非谓语动词，状语从句和定语从句多等。Word Choice:常用词为主，否定词加强语气A storywhenwherewhowhatho

9、wwhyReading for the basic informationwhen where who whatwhy one morningon the way to Mijas and home I,my fatherI sent my father to Mijas but forgot to pick him up,which made my father angry.I was absorbed in the film,forgot the time and lied to my father.如何构思续写的内容plotfeelingscharactersWriting purpos

10、eProblems and solutions BeginningBuild-upConflict Resolusion 1 2 3?1.Dad told me I could drive him to Mijas and then pick him at 4 pm.2.I was absorbed in the film that I forgot the time3.To avoid being punished,I lied to my dad4.?Story moutain BeginningConflict Build-up ResolutionEndingexcitedexcite

11、dDad told me I could drive him to Mijas and then pick him at 4 pmI was absorbed in the film that I forgot the timefrightenedfrightenedTo avoid being punished,I lied to my dadguiltyguiltyWhat did dad do next?What did I feel?主要人物主要人物语言和行言和行为性格特征性格特征 I At that time,I had just passed the driving test,an

12、d I hardly had a chance to use the car,so I said yes without hesitation.excitedEvery time I talk about the topic,something crowds in my mind as if it had just happened.regretfulI was so absorbed in the plot of the movie that I forgot the time.irresponsibleSo I decided to make up an excusedishonest主要

13、人物主要人物语言和行言和行为性格特征性格特征My father my father was sitting in a corner,waiting patiently.tolerant“Im very disappointed that you thought you had to lie to me,Jason.”disappointed“When you didnt show up on time,I called the gas station and asked if there was anything wrong.They told me you never picked up t

14、he car.So,you see,I know theres nothing wrong with the car at all.sensiblemethodicalMain idea作者驾车去接他的父亲，但是他因为去看电影而耽误了时间后，他谎称去修车了，最后谎言被拆穿了，这使得父亲非常生气。Make prediction 父亲对我这么做的反应是什么以及我的心里活动是什么以及我从这件事情当中得到了什么经验教训。Paragaph1:AwaveofguiltsweptovermeandIhadtoadmitthefactthatIhadgonetothemoviesandthatwasthere

15、alreasonwhyIwaslate._Paragraph 2：But father,its exactly eighteen miles home from here,and its dark.You cant walk back.I begged._ Make predictions Infer the development from the given sentencesTime:its latePlace:far away from homeFeeling:guiltyFeeling:more guiltyParagaph1:AwaveofguiltsweptovermeandIh

16、adtoadmitthefactthatIhadgonetothemoviesandthatwastherealreasonwhyIwaslate._Inferring the development Raise questions about the development1.What was fathers action next?2.How did father feel?Paragraph 2：But father,its exactly eighteen miles home from here,and its dark.You cant walk back.I begged._In

17、ferring the development Raise questions about the development1.Did father walk home?2.If yes/not,what did I do next?3.What did I feel?Writing based on the outline and using sentence patterns.情感描写的表达情感描写的表达动作描写动作描写合理的细节合理的细节描写描写分解动作，使动作分解动作，使动作过程化、具体化过程化、具体化羞愧Language database for descriptions 1.My t

18、hroat was dry and my face was burning up.2.So ashamed was I that I could feel my face burning/the blood rush to my face.3.I dropped my eyes.Language database for descriptions Emotional languages：Disappointed/frustratedOvercome with/by my bitter disappointment,my heart sank.in low spirits in an unple

19、asant mood I feel like all my insides have been drained out and I feel empty and let down.I feel sad,frustrated,angry,confused,hopeless and hurt all at the same time.关于诚信的谚语欺人只能一时，而诚信才是长久之策Decevingotherscanonlytemporarily,buthonestyislong.诚实是最好的准则Hoenstyisthebestpolicy.一诺千金Promiseisdebt.改过不嫌晚Itsneve

20、toolatetomend.A wave of guilt swept over me and I had to admit the fact that I had gone to the movies and that was the real reason why I was late.Dad listened carefully as a sadness passed through him，“Im angry,not with you but with myself.You see.I realize that I have failed as a father if after al

21、l these years you feel that you have to lie to me.I have failed because I have brought up a son who cannot even tell the truth to his own father.Im going to walk home now and think where I have gone wrong all these years”.samplesampleBut father,its exactly eighteen miles home from here,and its dark.

22、You cant walk back.I begged.My protests,my apologies and the rest of my words were useless.I had let my father down.and I was about to learn one of the most painful lessons of my life.Dad began walking along the dusty roads.I quickly jumped in the car and followed behind.I apologized all the way,telling him how sorry I was,but he simply ignored me.For 18 miles he kept walking.Seeing my father in so much pain was the most awful experience that I have ever faced.However it was also the most successful lesson.samplesample