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1、2023年Oknxvz2月11日雅思大作文写作演示与点评 | |生活| 一个人总要走陌生的路，看陌生的风景，听陌生的歌，然后在某个不经意的瞬间，你会发现，原本费尽心机想要忘记的事情真的就这么忘记了. |-郭敬明 2月11日雅思大作文写作演示与点评 2月11号大作文题目如下： Some people think that politicians have the greatest influence on the world.Other people, however, believe that scientists have the greatest influence.Discu both

2、of views and give your opinion. 该题表面上看起来属于新题，但实际上还是由科技类(scientist)和政府类(politicians)几个老的话题组合之后得到的新题。如2023年5月21号；2023年1月21号；2023年7月9号的考题。这再一次向烤鸭们验证了一个事实：雅思写作的考题并没有所谓的新题，有的只是各个高频话题的排列组合。只要平时把专业词汇、句式、素材整理好，做到触类旁通，同时多关注一些近期传媒的焦点，就不难揭开每个貌似全新考题的庐山真面目。 该文属于大作文中的第二类即report型：分析正反两方的观点并给出你的观点，现在从文章内容、结构、语言三方面为

3、烤鸭们做一个点拨，希望能对烤鸭们接下来的备考起到画龙点睛的作用。全文分4段展开： 首段交代背景，提出写作目的，共句话。 It is an indisputable fact that the driving force behind the development of every society is generated by people from all walks of life, especially politicians and scientists. 语言点评：注意句型it is an indisputable fact that 短语：people from all walk

4、s of life, driving force. However, when it comes to who exerts greater influence on human society, opinions tend to vary.This eay aims to explore the iue from different perspectives and draw some suggestive conclusions. 语言点评：注意短语：exert great influence on sb, explore sth from different perspectives,

5、draw some suggestive conclusions. 主题1段：交代政治家对社会发展的影响，从正面和负面两个角度展开，共句话。 No one can deny the fact that influential politicians constitute the major impetus in any social development.Acting as the representative of their citizens, these political leaders are supposed to make the wisest decision, manipu

6、late the soundest policies and iue the fairest laws. 语言点评：这两句话统领全段，提出该段的主要论点。注意双重否定表肯定句型No one can deny the fact that 句式的使用；排山倒海结构make the wisest decision, manipulate the soundest policies and iue the fairest laws.makers的使用。 Winston Churchill, the greatest British Prime Minister during the Second Wo

7、rld War, for instance, made the wisest decision by allying with the Soviet Union and rent armed forces from US to fight against Nazi.With his powerful speech delivered acro the nation and preeminent diplomatic skills, he saved his people from the torture of Germany and managed to help end the Second

8、 World War, thus promoting the peace proce worldwide. 语言点评：通过举温斯顿丘吉尔的例子使得句的论点跃然纸上，文章刹时间显得有血有肉。the greatest British Prime Minister during the Second World War;for instance等插入语的使用增强了文章的节奏感。With his powerful 和promoting the peace proce worldwide等伴随状语的使用更凸显出了考生的长句功底。 On the other hand, Adolf Hitler, the

9、infamous dictator of Nazi during the Second World War, initiated the terrible maacre against Jewish people and spread the ethnocentric views, holding that German is the most distinguished people in the world, which, of course,severely damaged the image of German on an international level. 语言点评：这一句尽管

10、只有一句话，但是这一长句中同位语，伴随状语，非限制性定语从句的娴熟使用无非能够构成该作文的潜在加分点。其中值得考生注意的专有词汇有： maacre, ethnocentric, infamous, dictator等等。 主题2段： 交代科学家对社会发展的影响，同样也从正面和负面两个角度展开，共句话。 At the same time, the role of scientists can never be underestimated since without their effort, hardly can we enjoy the convenience brought about b

11、y the newest technology which is basically initiated by their researches.James Watt, for instance, invented the steamer which became a trigger of the Industrial Revolution and marked the beginning of a new time: Age of Steam.Thomas Edison brought forth the first electrical bulb on our planet and ena

12、bled every household to enjoy infinite luminosity.Alexander Bell, father of the first telephone, shook the world with the dawning of telecommunicating era. 语言点评：第一句提出该段的分论点1再援用大量的事例来一一论证。先后列举了考官耳熟能详的瓦特发明蒸汽机、爱迪生发明电灯泡、贝尔发明电话机等。尽管耳熟能详，但是例子采用排比的形式进行堆砌无疑能凸显考生深厚的知识储备，毕竟在考场上能够做到信手捏来谈何容易，更何况要采用不同的语言来描述相同的身份

13、发明家，要用不同的语言来表达同一中状况某某时代的开启。这里分别用了which became a trigger of the industrial revolution and marked the beginning of a new era;brought forth the first electrical bulb;shook the world with the dawning of telecommunicating era.来表示某某时代的降临。For instance, father of the first telephone等插入语使得文章有：“嘈嘈切切错杂弹，大珠小珠落玉

14、盘”的音韵美。 所有的这“台上一分钟”要求考生“台下十年功”的练习过程一定不能间断。 Neverthele, besides being a bleing,science can also become a curse when it is manipulated with some unjustified purposes.P.E.A.Lenard, a German physical scientist who won the Nobel Price in Physics in 1905, became a persistent follower of Hitler and murder

15、of thousands of Jewish people by producing some poisonous chemicals. 语言点评：笔锋一转，反面案例千呼万唤始出来。着重论述如果科学家心存邪念就容易被反人类势力所利用最终危害整个世界的和平。 双胞胎词汇：a bleing and a curse 的出现为文章锦上添花，孤独的名词前面用丰富的形容词进行温暖使得句式更加丰满充实。如purpose前面用unjustified温暖, follower前面用persistent温暖，chemicals前面用poisonous 来温暖。 结尾段：总结全文，重申论点，共句话。 To concl

16、ude, scientists and politicians benefit our society in different ways and the saying that one way is superior to another seems to be fallacious.However,at the same time, we are supposed to be aware of the negative effects of both sides and take some precautions to prevent some potential disasters from happening. 语言点评：结尾段采用however转折的形式使得作者的观点跃然于纸上，既要公正看待科学家和政治家各自在不同领域的成就，同时也要清醒地意识到预防潜在危险之必要性。 Oknxvz2月11日雅思大作文写作演示与点评 11月21日雅思A类考试大作文 11月30日雅思A类大作文张嵩 8月11日雅思写作 雅思大作文写作套句与 8月16日雅思A类大作文 大连欧联雅思培训2月24日场雅思大作文写作真题汇总 雅思写作大作文11：关于政府调控房地产 bclqurj2_010年11月4日6日雅思口语回忆_ bcklfbk2_010年11月20日雅思笔试回忆_