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1、.73 全国创新英语大赛优秀作文题目：；Directions:；Readthefollowingparagrap；Howdoyouunderstandvolunt；Comeandjoinusinvolunteer ； OnVolunteer；黄昕彤辽宁省鞍山市鞍山一中 108 班；Thedefinitionofthewordvo；Undoubtfully,thosevolunt；Peoplearo 题目：Directions:Read the following paragraph and write a composition as stated at about 300 words in

2、60 minutes. Your composition will be graded according to clarity, accuracy and meaningfulness. In accordance with CRI news, the spirit of Chinese volunteers, from responding to the May 12 earthquake to the 2008 Beijing Olympic Games, not only touched the Chinese people, but also generated worldwide

3、attention. Official statistics show that china has accumulated about 8 billion hours of volunteer work from 380 million volunteers since 1993 and is going to have more and more volunteers, especially the youth.How do you understand volunteer work? In what way(s) is it important to promote the well-b

4、eing of individuals, families, communities and the world at large? Your writing ought to .contain three parts, your viewpoint, the supporting ideas, and the conclusion.Come and join us in volunteer work right now!On Volunteer黄昕彤 辽宁省鞍山市鞍山一中 108 班The definition of the word volunteer in Lougnan（Longman

5、） Dictionary is someone who helps others sponstaneously（spontaneously） and willingly. Thats true! Life is a style of enjoying yourself, not only by entertaing and enriding yourself, but also by the process of helping others.Undoubtfully, those volunteers reveal their great love and passion for their

6、 country. Love is the eternal theme of the world, Without hove(love), its like birds without wings, failing to show its talents of flying, Its like spring without flowers, burying is charming fragrants in the deep soil. Their volunty work unites China, shouing the world how united Chinese people are

7、 shocking the world of its cooperation.People around the country are making their efforts to helping others, which leaves the world an impression that China is a veal country, and all the people here are like brothers and sisters, who cares a lot for others. You can never imagine how touched I was w

8、hen I watched the TV program called “Moving China”. 13 .peasants from tangshang volunteered to help those victims of Sichuang on hearing the tremendous earthquake happened there, leaving all their farm work done in the field they sacrifiled anything and helped others at any cost, for they knew the g

9、lant pains the earthquake brings to people. They can never forget how much pains they havendertaken in the earthquake and how much help they have received from the world. They compared their own feelings to the victims and passed the splrit on. In this sense, people will pass the spirit from generat

10、ion to queneration, from China to all over the world. Then, how sweet will the World be!I have a dream that one day, I will be a member of the volunteer team. I have a dream that oneday, Ill make contributions to China however slightest it may be. I have a dream that one day Ill be a founder of a wo

11、rld Charity, helping people all over the world. Im firmly convinced that it will not only be a drean for me, but also a drean for people all over China, all over the world, and for the great Global Village.专家建议：整篇文章条理清晰，结构完整，总体感觉很好。但有个别语法错误，固定搭配有些用得不够准确，建议多用课本学过的固定搭配或是词组造句。.专家点评：文章语言流畅，运用了修辞手法，展现出一定

12、的语言功底。此外，论据生动有力，让人信服。如果句子之间的多用些关联词就更好了。陈茜 江苏省哈尔滨市第三中学高三 18 班Dear grandfather:How are you?I am writing to invite you to join us, in the next year, to be a voluntear in the great event, which is to hold in Shanghai. We, a generation born in the 90s in our city, have made a team to do the volunteer wor

13、k. And you are welcomed by all our team members awing to your great amount of knowledge about Chinese traditions and culture. Please dont tell me you are too old to do this job. I believe you are sure to accept my invitation after reading my following explannation of the importance of the volunteer

14、work.Nowadays, volunteer work, which has raised public interest and concern, is becomming more and more popular throughout the world. As is known to all, volunteer work is not only meaningful but also necessary. One my personal wete, whats more, its interesting and pleasant! It help us develop ourse

15、l .Firstly, for individuals, especially those young, to do volunteer work is an awailuabe wany to goin social experience. By doing volunteer work, they can meet vorrious people and they may run across all kinds of troubles. They however, can become mature and determined by solving these problems. Yo

16、u know, no pains, no gains. Also, individuals will realize that they do make a difference in someone elses life, even the whole event, the world! Their confidence can be rovised and confidence is what it takes to do any job well.For families, if youre the side that received the help of the volunteer

17、s, of couse your issue will be more easily dealt with. If youre the side who give others your hand, you will realize there exists no better way to educate your children that “a virtwre deserues amother” because youll get the best present - smile deeply from ones heart, in the whole world.It is a gre

18、at chance for all members getting closer to each other in communities by taking part in volunteer work. Their team spirits, their co-operation will be great improued. So, why not?The most importantly, for the whole world, for the entire human race, volunteer work will make earth a better place to li

19、ve in, it is through volunteer work that we know there are so many people are willing to help others although they cant get money .from it. It is through volunteer work that we know we are all brothers and sisters, that we are all families.My dear grandfather, canre on! Join us and help introduce ow

20、r great Chinese culture to the world. 21 centuring is on open cewtury. You can trust yourself and please trust us, too! Well help you and we need you help! Lets make the world a better place by being a volunteer! Its a small step for us but it is a leurge one for the whole world!Love you.Your grandd

21、aught.专家建议：句子之间的衔接做的还不是很到位，建议多练练关联词的用法。词汇不够丰富，句型变化不多，建议多看些范文，多练一些经典句型。专家点评：文章立意很好，整体结构清晰，语言大体流畅，还能够引经据典，显示出有一定的英语(论坛)文化底蕴。To be a volunteer ，Bring a ray of sunshine陈天悦 山东省济南市山东省齐钢高级中学高三 4 班Dear Tom:It is a great pleasure for me to have the wondeful chance to put .pen to paper and send my greetings t

22、o you. You said that you wanted to be a volunteer and didnt know whether you should or not. I want to help you analyse it.In my opinion. I think it is not noly a good chance to help others but also a good opportunity to make selp-improvement. Youd better participate in the volunteer work. If we comp

23、ane youth to flouers, as is often the case, then the young volunteers are the most beautiful flowers. By joining in the vounteer work, you will leam how to help others and how to love others. Whats more you can also find it out that there are many people suffering from disaster and then you will val

24、ue your comfortable life. Although you may feel very tired as a volunteer and it may cost you much time to help others, I still insist that you should be a volunteer because the advantages bright about by volunteer work overweigh thedisadvantages.It all the people refused to be volunteers, the peopl

25、e suffered from the may 12 earthquake could lose heart and most of them wouldnt have the chance to survive from that disaster. If none of the people wanted to be a volunteer, the Beijing olympic Games would be a failure. If every people didnt feel like being a volunteer, there would be no people cle

26、aning the environment .and protecting the beautiful scenery automatically. It was terrible! From all mentioned above, volunteers play a very important part in our daily life. To be a volunteer will gain glory for China. As is brow to all, Chinese children are always laughed at for lack of practice.

27、So to be a volunteer is a good chance to canpensate for it.From my point of view, its high time that you became a volunteer and learned to help others. If everyone makes a contribution to helping others, the world will be much more beautiful!At last, wish you all the best!Yours sincerely.Lily.专家建议：一

28、篇文章的结构是评判该文章优劣的重要参考标准，但结构显然不够简洁清晰，所以建议作者能在平时多阅读英文报纸上的文章，有意识地观察规范的英语文章是怎样设计结构的。专家点评：文章二三段的结构很混乱，建议这样的文章段落都应写成总、分、总的形式更能突出文章的逻辑性，并在“分”的部分也一条一条分开写，而不是都堆在一段内，让人分不.清哪句是观点哪句是论证，很混乱。另外注意同义词的替换已是文章表达更丰富，比如文章中多次出现的帮助他人就都是使用：help others 就显得过于单一了 Volunteers李彦妮 辽宁省鞍山市鞍山一中 10.14 班There is a vivid saying that eve

29、ry glorious event is justifiably connected with volunteers who is a group of people, holding the fundemental to help others without pay-back benefits. In 1993, when the new word burt out among social society, most of us gave a slur to it in considering of economy. The special group, however, is just

30、 like a river - small at first, contained within its banks, flood passionally then merged into the sea, for the sense of moral considerations. And now, I quite support to be a volunteer.We can never forget these moving scenes: A group of adolecents from Beijing dashed to the City of Wenchuan who gav

31、e up their comfortable living situations and picked up the heavy burden to save people buried into the ground, while a middle aged white collar who threw away his computer and salary came here to fetch wictims lives from the death. It is volunteers who rushed to this place which has suffered from th

32、e catastrophe that gave a great help to those victims in need. A volunteer can support a piece of sky, and this one reason I am .eager to join them.Secondly, only a volunteer who is in active part in Beijing Olympic Games will he give a great help to those losers. It is volunteers who gave us a warm

33、 welcome to Beijing that put the glorious sports meeting from in chaos to in order. A person, as we know, who hasnt join into the group of volunteer is one of the unfortunate victims of this society which is occupied with love. All of us are in high pressure in this adverse circumstance. Our mind ca

34、tches hold of something and will not let it go, if we choose the way to argue with the mind, the stronger the will, the more fuitile the task, so we, should choose a way to help others, to see the smile from others. Then the pressure get out suiftly. I always go into rapture at a mere mention of bei

35、ng a volunteer and regard it as a person who is eager to help others or a group not in the same class with the suburban social-climbers. It seems a clich but a saying which is an infallibility that a splendid case can not leave a volunteer just as a fish can not live without water.专家点评：作者尽量用到了一些高级词语和句型，表明作者有一定的英语功底，但是小的错误频发，如单词拼写，语法问题，句子逻辑，这在某一方面也表明作者的基本功有待提高，继续努力。专家建议：用词准确是写作的基础。对于学习英语的中国