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1、编写要求12011年高考试题要求：务必准确，不得与原题有误差。 （标出试卷名及分值）2名师解析说明： 剖析该题命题的关键所在，特点所在，考查目的所在。 此类作文如何提高分数（技巧所在） （得分亮点所在）。 写作该文题要表达的内容要点有哪些。 列出可能用到的词汇（ 810 个左右）与句式（ 45 个左右） 。 此类作文忌讳有哪些（失分因素） ，如何避免。 字数 400-600 字。3满分作文（ 2 篇，优秀佳作，不能有任何错误）说明： 旁批： 点评字、词、句、构思等方面的亮点并说明理由，对应的关键词、句用下划波浪线标出。 68 个，每个要点讲解字数约为3060 字。 满分揭秘： 结合习作本文从宏

2、观、综合的角度，分几个方面评析，如内容要点、行文连贯、语言运用等等。针对性要强，切记泛泛而谈。字数100150 字。4. 稿费标准 ：每千字 50元。5. 交稿时间： 2011年 6 月 20日之前。编写体例高考真题江苏卷第五部分：书面表达（满分25 分）81.下面这幅照片展现了女儿为回家妈妈拿包的情景。请根据你对这幅照片的理解用英语写一篇短文。你的短文应包含以下内容：1. 描述照片内容，如情景、人物、动作，等等；2. 结合自身实际，谈谈你的感想；3. 举例说明你能为家长减负做些什么。注意：1. 可参照图中文字及下面文章开头所给提示，作必要的发挥想象。2. 词数 150 左右。开头已经写好，不

3、计入总词数。3. 作文中不得提及考生所在学校和本人姓名。The burden of students has been a hot topic for years, but the load of parents has received little attention, especially from their own children.名师解析 试题解读精选学习资料 - - - - - - - - - 名师归纳总结 - - - - - - -第 1 页，共 15 页这图片展现了女儿帮回家的妈妈拿包的情景。图片生动地呈现了一个3-5 岁的小姑娘，吃力地将大包从妈妈身上取下，来减缓妈妈背部

4、的疼痛，减轻妈妈肩上的负担，多么感人的画面啊。当今社会都在呼吁，减轻孩子的压力、负担。但，谁在关心孩子的父母？有人说，当今的孩子不缺少爱，不缺少呵护，他们缺失的是感恩，是责任。该考题从此作为切入点，引导孩子要理解父母，关心父母，承担责任。试题的形式新颖，内容符合主流价值观，引导孩子从小学会关爱他人，有爱心，有责任感。只有培养孩子从小做起，从现在做起，才能加快和谐社会的构建，也才能使和谐社会延续。从这一角度分析，试题具有较强的思想性。此篇短文， 不仅要求考生简洁明了地描述图片的内容、谈及个人感想， 而且要求写出具体做法。试题考查学生的描述能力。然而描述能力离不开学生的观察能力、想象能力和语言组织

5、能力，在某种程度上为考生提供自由发挥和自由表达的空间。 写作要点 描写图片的内容，如情景、任务、动作等； 结合自身实际，谈谈感想； 举例说明能为家长做些什么以减轻他们的负担； 可用素材 词汇burden, do some housework, happiness, ease, support the family, such as, pressure, moved 句式In the picture stands a little girl who is trying her best to lift her moms big bag.Her mother with a big smile on

6、 her face is full of happiness.Firstly, we can do some housework which is endless and tiring.Secondly, we can do something small, such as making a cup of tea, preparing a simplemeal or turning on light music for them when they return from work , which sometimemakes a great difference to them.The pic

7、ture makes me lost in thought. 注意事项 文中开头对照片内容，如情景、人物、动作的描写要简洁、生动；结合自身谈谈感想部分要依托照片内容，且不可空发感想，给人无病呻吟的感觉； 举例说明要具体； 为使文章生动起见，在描述照片内容时，可使用现在进行时。满分文展示1From the picture, we can see these words “ to ease the pain in her back, I removed the heavy load from mom s shoulders.”In the picture stands a little girl

8、who is trying her best to lift her mom s big bag. Her moved mother with a big smile on her face is full of happiness.I have some thoughts about this picture. Our parents, burdened with family and work pressure work day and night to support the family. However, many of us children who are busy with o

9、ur studies only care about ourselves, ignoring our parents .In my opinion, we should do what we can to remove their load from now on. First we can do some housework which is endlessand tiring . Next, as students, working hard and improving are our duty which would give our parents great comfort. las

10、t but not the least, we ought to understand and love our parents from the bottom of our hearts, which, of course, would make them relieved. 旁批：精选学习资料 - - - - - - - - - 名师归纳总结 - - - - - - -第 2 页，共 15 页这是一个完全倒装句，介词短语放句首时，句子应全部倒装， 倒装句使句子表达简洁、生动，使文章更加出彩。“大”“小”两个反义词起到反衬作用，言外之意是女孩小小年纪就能为母亲分担沉重的负担。此处彰显出考生的

11、巧妙构思。此句给妈妈加了两个定语，过去分词形容词moved 和 with 复合结构作定语，把妈妈感动和幸福的表情生动地呈现在读者面前，表现了考生不凡的驾驭词语的能力。“ thought”的意思是“思想，想法，见解，观念”。该考生能恰当地使用这一词语，显现其具有较丰富的词汇。burden sb with sth, be burdened with 汉语意思是“负担着，背负着”。此处使用恰当到位。分词短语作伴随状语使句子表达简洁，避免连续使用简单句。这两个单词突出家务活繁重且无止无休，同时也突出父母平时劳累。该考生在谈及具体做法时叙述了三点，不仅帮父母身体上减负而且帮父母精神上减压，从心灵上给予他

12、们慰藉，文章很有深度。 满分揭秘：该考生严格按考题要求，出色完成写作任务。 首先以简洁生动的语言描述了照片的信息。其次该考生在谈及自身体会时态度诚恳，剖析较为透彻。 最后说到自己的做法，该考生能从身心两方面谈及为父母减负，文章内容具有一定深度。行文过程中， 该考生能够恰当的使用一些较高级的词汇如burdened with, thought, tiring, endless 等，这些词汇使文章表达更加准确到位同时也给文章增添几分文采。文中娴熟地使用过去分词作定语及倒装句等，充分体现出该考生扎实的语言功底及自如运用语言的能力。综上所述， 此篇文章无论是篇章布局还是细节的处理，都是一篇高质量的临场作

13、文，值得推荐给同学们。满分文展示2The burden of students has been a hot topic for years, but the load of parents has received little attention, especially from their own children.As can be seen from the picture, a mother comes back home,tired out , to ease the pain in her back, a little girl removes the heavy load f

14、rom mom s shoulders and mom with a big smile on her face is deeply moved.The picture makes me lost in thought. . Parents spare no effort to bring us up. They are always devoted selflessly to us and don t expect any reward.As their children, we must do something to ease their load. Firstly, we must b

15、ehave ourselves and not make them worry about us, which would reduce their mental pressure. Secondly, we can do something small, such as making a cup of tea preparing a simple meal or turning on light music for them when they return from work, which sometimes makes a great difference to them. Finall

16、y, we should help them do some housework regularly. 旁批：as 引导的非限制定语从句放句首，是定语从句中较难的知识点，该考生能娴熟地运用到写作中去，足见其功底非同一般。tired out在句中做主语补足语，强调母亲下班回来时精疲力竭。如删去，其表达效果大打折扣，给人一字千金的感觉。lost in thought 意思是“陷入沉思” ，类似的表达还有deep in thought 或 thoughtful ,语意表达丰富，使文章富有质感。spare no effort to do sth 意为不遗余力地做某事，be devoted selfle

17、ssly, dont expect any 精选学习资料 - - - - - - - - - 名师归纳总结 - - - - - - -第 3 页，共 15 页reward 这几个较高级的短语，对母亲品质进行诠释赞美，语言表达有力度，给人以掷地有声之感，富有感染力。阅卷老师会再次对其语言表达能力刮目相看。两次使用情态动词must 表示该生的决心，若改成其他情态动词如should, can 等语气则没有这么坚决。在谈到具体做法时， 该考生使用firstly, secondly, finally把文章的内容巧妙地连接起来，文章脉络清晰，更加有条理。 small 与 make a great diff

18、erence 形成极大的反差， 此处的言外之意是一些微不足道的事情可能给父母带来极大的精神慰藉。这是该考生思维的独具匠心之处。 such as 这一介词短语列出了我能够做的一些事情，语意丰富，但不罗嗦。如果改成三个简单句，则大为逊色。 总评：文章开头对照片的描述简洁且能切中要点。第二部分谈到自己的感受时，主要赞美母亲的品质， 用词大气， 有力度， 富有感染力。 第三部分谈及自己的做法，使用了 firstly, secondly, finally 把文章内容巧妙连接起来，使得文章上下连贯，结构清晰。从语言使用角度分析文章，也是亮点频出 : be deeply, moved, mental pre

19、ssure ,spare no effort to do sth/ be devoted to sb/ sth selflessly /behave oneself (举止规范 )等高级词汇点缀其中，文章精彩纷呈。总之，本文无论从结构还是从语言看，都是难得的佳作，值得广大同学欣赏借鉴。标准范文The burden of students has been a hot topic for years, but the load of parents has received little attention, especially from their own children.The pict

20、ure shows us a touching moment when a little comes to greet her working mom. Realizing her mom must be tired after a day s work, the girl helps to remove the bag from her shoulder .In response, the mom kneels down to show how happy and thankful she feels.All this reminds me of my mother who has been

21、 doing whatever she could to let me have the best. But, totally engaged in my own study, I seldom pay attention to what mother needs and feels, and always think studying well is the only thing I could do in return. Now I know I can do my bit to help with the everyday washing, bedroom cleaning or at

22、least prepare breakfast myself, so as to share mother s daily burden. The picture convince me it is even more important to be a good daughter than a good student.高考真题广东卷一书面表达（满分40 分）以下是一本图书的基本信息及相关报道。基本信息：（1）书名： Battle Hymn of the Tiger Mother （2）作者： Amy Chua ，美籍华人，耶鲁大学教授（3）出版时间：2010 年（4）内容：作者用中国传统方

23、式教育两个女儿的故事（5）效应：引发了中美教育方式孰优孰劣的讨论相关报道：（1）中文版： 2011 年初开始在中国销售（2）意外反应：多数中国妈妈不赞同作者的做法精选学习资料 - - - - - - - - - 名师归纳总结 - - - - - - -第 4 页，共 15 页（3）最新消息：17 岁的大女儿已被哈佛和耶鲁录取*耶鲁： Yale； * 哈佛： Harward写作内容 根据以上信息写一篇图书介绍，内容包括：1、图书的基本信息；2、图书的相关报道。写作要求 只能用 5 个句子表达全部内容。评分标准 句子结构准确，信息内容完整，篇章连贯。名师解析 试题解读试题要求考生根据一本图书的基本

24、信息及相关报道，写一篇图书简介。试题要求明确，内容详尽， 不易跑题。 但是试题规定只能使用五个句子表达全部内容，这就要求考生具有较强的提炼和整合信息的能力，及驾驭语言的能力，即把平时所学的语法知识灵活地运用到写作中去。 写作要点 图书的基本信息（书名、作者、出版时间、内容、效应）； 图书的相关报道：a.中文版， 2011 年初开始在中国销售；b.意外反应，多数中国妈妈不赞同作者的做法；c.最新消息， 17 岁的大女儿已被哈佛和耶鲁录取； 可用素材 词汇publish, write, at the beginning of, in Chinese traditional way, the maj

25、ority of surprisingly, be admitted to, approve of 句式A book, whose title is Battle Hymn of the Tiger Mother, written by a ChineseAmerican ，Amy Chua, a professor of Yale University, was published in 2010 and its Chinese edition appeared in Chinese book markets at the beginning of 2011.The book told st

26、ories of the author s educating her two daughters in Chinese traditional way which caused a heated discussion about which educational way is better.Since publication in 2010, it has resulted in a heated discussion about whether Chinese t raditional education is better than that of America.Surprising

27、ly, the majority of Chinese mothers don t support what the author has done.Now, the elder daughter of the author who is only seventeen years old has been admitted to both Yale University and Harward University. 注意事项试题所给的信息较多，尽量避免直译；要巧妙地使用英语中一些地道语法结构，如同位语，过去分词作定语，定语从句及名词性从句等。尽量跳出试题中汉语的句式及表述，运用英语进行思维；

28、文章的逻辑性要强，避免信息杂乱堆放在一起。满分文展示1A book, whose title is Battle Hymn of the Tiger Mother, written by a Chinese-American Amy Chua, a professor of Yale University, was published in 2010 and its Chinese edition appeared in Chinese book markets at the beginning of 2011.The book told stories of the author s edu

29、cating her two daughters in Chinese traditional way which caused a heated discussion about which educational way is better. Surprisingly, the majority of Chinese mothers don t support what 精选学习资料 - - - - - - - - - 名师归纳总结 - - - - - - -第 5 页，共 15 页the author has done. The latest news came that the aut

30、hor s elder daughter had been admitted toboth Yale University and Harward University. She is only seventeen years old now. 旁批：文章第一句使用whose 引导的非限制性定语从句，过去分词作定语等，彰显了考生较强的驾驭语言能力。语言信息量大且合乎英语的表达方式。heated意思是“激烈的” ，如去掉这一词，文章则显得较为平淡。这一单词使用准确到位。按照常理， 中国的教育方式应为中国妈妈所喜爱，但却遭到大多数中国妈妈的反对，所以令人感到意外。类似的表达有：to one s s

31、urprise, much to one s surprise 等。the majority of 汉语意思是“绝大多数”。类似表达有most of 。that 引导同位语从句，陈述最新消息的具体内容。同位语从句属于名词性从句，是高中阶段语法难点，该生能够娴熟的使用，表现其具有扎实语言基本功。be admitted to 汉语意思为“被允许进入”，此处可以译为“被录取”，to 在这一短语中是介词。然而admit sb/sth to be 意思是“认为或承认 , 是”，在这一短语中，to 是不定式的标志。 Fg. You must admit the task to be difficult .

32、考生能准确使用这一较高级的短语，说明考生平时注意词汇的积累，这是学好语言的重要因素。 总评：该考生能够对所提供的信息进行合理的整合，清晰地介绍书的全部信息及相关报道，逻辑性强。 在行文过程中， 能够熟练运用平时学习的语言基础知识。一篇简短的图书简介涉及高中阶段较难掌握的语法知识，如过去分词做定语、定语从句、同位语、同位语从句、被动语态等， 表现出该考生较强的逻辑思维能力和语言运用能力。本文描述客观， 完全符合试题要求，是不可多得的优秀范文。满分文展示2I ll recommend you a book, Battle Hymn of Tiger Mother. The book written

33、 by an ChineseAmerican, a professor of Yale University，is about how the author educated her two daughters in Chinese traditional way. After publication in 2010, it resulted in a heateddiscussion about whether Chinese traditional education is better than that of America. At the beginning of 2011, the

34、 Chinese edition of the book began to sell in China but what is unexpectedis that the majority of Chinese mothers don t approve of what the author did. Now, the elder daughter of the author who is only seventeen years old has been admitted to both Yale University and Harward University. 旁批：sb recomm

35、end sb/sth to sb or recommendsth sb sth “向某人推荐 , ”的意思。how 引导从句充当介词about 的宾语，此处体现该考生语法基础知识很扎实。result in 汉语的意思是“导致” ，类似的表达有cause, bring about lead to 等。heated 意思是“激烈的” ，此处突出强调这本书所带来的极大影响。主语从句属于名词性从句的一种，what 引导的主语从句是高中阶段的语言难点，再次证明该考生具有扎实的语言基本功。这几个较高级的短语给文章增加文采，更能提升文章的权威性。 总评：文章从书的作者、内容、出版时间、 所引起的反响及相关报

36、道等几方面如实地进行说明，客观、真实。在行文过程中，能够准确地使用名词性从句如主语从句、宾语从句、同谓语从句等较高级的语法结构。unexpected, approve of, the majority of, result in, recommend, be admitted to 等高级词汇使语言表达更加精确、到位。该生能够用英语进行思维，语言表达符精选学习资料 - - - - - - - - - 名师归纳总结 - - - - - - -第 6 页，共 15 页合英语的句式， 具有较强的驾驭语言能力，且文章的逻辑性较强。因此这篇文章可作为此类文章的写作的范例推荐给同学们。标准范文第一节：基础

37、写作The book Battle Hymn of the Tiger Mother written by Amy Chua, a Chinese American, who is a professor in Yale University, was published in 2010. The book is about how th4e author educated her two daughters with Chinese traditional education mode, which brought about heated discussion about which is

38、 better between Chinese education mode and American education mode. In early 2011, the book came onto the market in China. Contrary to people s expectations, most of the Chinese mothers are not in favor of the author s way she educated children. However, according to the latest news, her elder daugh

39、ter, has been admitted into Yale University as well as Harvard University.广东卷 2第三节：读写任务（共1 小题；满分）阅读下面短文，然后按要求写一篇150 词左右的英语短文。When sam first got to his boarding school with his parents, he was very happy. He thought he would be able to go home every weekend. When he was told that he would not, he sta

40、rted crying, because the thought of not seeing his parents was driving him crazy.He was given uniforms and all other things that be would need for the term. He strted crying when it was time for his parents to leave. He was then taken to the class, where he saw other children happy. He tried as much

41、 as he could to fit in but he could not because his was at home. He started felling homesick （想家） and wanted to get home as soon as possible.He got sick soon because he could not eat the school food. He could not concentrate in the classroom. All he could think of was being at home with his family.

42、He had one mobile phone or other means to get in touch with his parents. He was angry and felt lonely. He thought his parents hated him and that was why they left him in a boarding school.写作内容 1、以约 30 个词概括上文的主要内容。2、以约 120 个词讲述一次你（或你的朋友）想家的经历，内容包括：（1）时间、地点和起因；（2）想家给学习或者生活带来的影响；（3）你（或你的朋友）是如何应对的。写作要求

43、1、作文中可以使用亲身经历或虚构的故事，也可以参照阅读材料的内容，但不得直接引用原文中的句子。2、作文中不能出现真实姓名和学校名称。评分标准 概括准确，语言规范，内容合适，语篇连贯。名师解析 试题解读此项读写任务是写一篇记叙文，记述一次你（或你的朋友）想家的经历。此类试题属开放性作文， 题目在考查学生写作能力的同时，也考查学生的阅读理解能力及一定的想象力。考生应根据题目的要求，叙述过程要完整，详略得当，语言生动，情感真切。精选学习资料 - - - - - - - - - 名师归纳总结 - - - - - - -第 7 页，共 15 页 写作要点记叙这次想家的经历的时间、地点和起因；想家给学习或

44、者生活带来的影响；你（或你的朋友）是如何应对的。 可用素材 词汇experience, miss my family, encourage, homesick, overcome, share, gradually, actively, 句式I was unable to sleep well and lost my appetite because of missing my family.Therefore, I became too tired and too weak to take part in activities in the summer camp.Trying changi

45、ng myself, I communicated with them more actively, forced myself to eat more and shared my feelings with them during the rest time.As soon as I closed my eyes, my mother s and my father s faces would clearly appear in my mind.I m proud that I overcame homesickness. 注意事项语言要流畅，朗朗上口，切忌拖泥带水。材料取舍要详略得当。叙述

46、过程应以一般过去时为主。以叙述为主，情感要真实，切忌无病呻吟。满分文展示1例文 1Sam was very happy when he was first sent to the boarding school, but he was upset and lonely and soon he became homesick, which caused a bad influence on his health and studies so that he couldn t concentrate on his lessons. As is known to us all, home is a

47、heaven to everyone who is away from his family. I ve had one experience which is about feeling homesick. Several yeas ago, when I was a little girl, I took part in a summer camp which is far from home. I began to miss my family from the second day and wanted to get home as soon as possible.I was una

48、ble to sleep well and lost my appetite because of missing my family, Therefore, I became too tired and too weak to join in activities in the summer camp. Finally, I got a serious headache and could hardly go on with the camp any more.However the decision to give up made me suddenly pay attention to

49、the students around me.How happy they were, though tired ！ In the meanwhile, they tried to encourage me to go on. They said“ Cheer up and everything wil l be all right.”Trying changing myself , I communicated with them more, participated in every activity actively, forced myself to eat more and shar

50、ed my feelings with them during the rest time. Gradually, I fit in and even liked the camp and loved everyone around me. I m proud that I overcame homesickness. 旁批：heaven 此处的意思是“快乐的世界”，考生用词恰当，收到了四两拨千斤的效果。如改换成 a pleasant place, a warm and comfortable place, a cosy place 等都达不到此效果。这句话起到承上启下的作用，过度衔接自然，达