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1、2019 2019 稽阳联考读后续写稽阳联考读后续写年份年份体裁体裁 主题主题细节描写特点细节描写特点年份年份体裁体裁 主题主题细节描写特点细节描写特点2016.10记叙文Jane 和丈夫在野营时吵架走散和丈夫在野营时吵架走散并迷路并迷路侧重心理描写2017.6记叙文Mac 和朋友骑行途中偶遇恶狼和朋友骑行途中偶遇恶狼侧重动作描写2017.7记叙文“我我”与健忘母亲的旅行趣事与健忘母亲的旅行趣事侧重人物性格描写2018.6记叙文“我我”与父亲去西部荒野度假与父亲去西部荒野度假时骑马迷路时骑马迷路侧重环境描写indirect characterization (间接人物塑造间接人物塑造)To r

2、eveal a characters traits by describing his or her appearance, thoughts, words, actions, and other characters comments on him or her.Read for plotRead for plot把握故事情节把握故事情节Read for cluesRead for clues寻找故事线索寻找故事线索Read for Read for developmentdevelopment推测故事发展推测故事发展A storyEvent (what)Time (when)Place(w

3、here)Characters (who)Read for plot (把握故事情节) Plot(how)阅读下面短文根据所给情节进行续写,使之构成个完整的故事 After study for hours. I went outside and up to the roof nearby for a break and watched people swimming in the sea. It was a sunny day-a blue, cloudless sky over a calm sea. But then, as I looked in the distance, I disc

4、overed a series of three or four big waves heading towards the shore. Id seen these mini- tsunamis(小型海啸) many times before. They were heading at speed in the direction of the swimming area. Most people knew to look out for them, but from the screams that started coming from the beach, I could tell s

5、omeone was in trouble. Without thinking, I ran down into the street, holding my bodyboard (冲浪板)on the way and shouted at a stranger to call the coastguard(海岸整卫) My neighbor Tom had heard the screaming as well and was also outside with his bodyboard, so together we rushed to the steps that led down t

6、o the sea Once we got closer, we discovered the waves had pulled a boy and a girl into the open sea. I know that the nearest boat would take at least 30 minutes to reach us. I wasnt used to this sort of emergency-Id never been trained as a lifeguard-but I didnt think twice about trying to save them.

7、 I suppose in a way I wanted to impress everyone; at 19, a deal like that can seem like a good opportunity to show off Tom and I dived into the water and it took us 10 minutes to get to them. When we finally reached them, they were almost lifeless with only their heads coming in and out of the water

8、. We could tell they were still alive from their small breaths but it was clear they wouldnt have been able to stay there much longer. I held the boy and pulled him over my board. Tom then moved the girl onto his board.Read for plot a.We pulled kids onto our boards.b.I shouted at a stranger to call

9、the coastguard.c. The kids were almost lifeless.d. A boy and a girl were pulled into the sea.e. I dived into the sea with Tom to save the kids.f. I noted mini-tsunamis heading towards the shore.g. I went out for a break after hours of study.on a sunny dayat the seasidea boy and a girl; I;Tom; coastg

10、uardsaving two kidsgfdbecaRead for clues . Without thinking, I ran down into the street, holding my bodyboard on the way and shouted at a stranger to call the coastguard.Generally, a bodyboard is 1.5 to 2.7m in length and it weighs about 11 to 25 kg.tool help character traits: thoughtful/considerate

11、.indirect characterization settinginciting incidentRising actionClimaxFalling actionResolutionDenouement A _ _ sky over a _ seablue cloudless calmMin-tsunamis _ towards the shore._ started from beachheadedScreams we _ to the steps, led down to the seaRead for development rushedWe reached the boy and

12、 girl but _ from the landtoo far away 划线词分类划线词分类人物类事物类动作类距离时间 划线词分类划线词分类人物类a boy and a girl; Tom事物类waves; boat; opportunity; bodyboard动作类swimming; save距离in the distance时间longerRead for developmentPara.1 We discussed pushing them back to the shore, but we were too far out.Para 2. That night, word cam

13、e from the hospital that the two kids were in good condition. The problems we met: The help we got: tiredness/ fierce waves/ dying kids.the coastguard.The gratefulness we received: The lesson I learnt: from the two kids parents/ the media. One simple act of kindness can really make a difference.Wher

14、e there is kindness, there is a miracle.One good turn deserves another. Read for developmentMind your Mind your handwritinghandwriting注意书写注意书写Mind your Mind your languagelanguage注意语言注意语言Mind your Mind your themetheme注意主题注意主题MeaningfulColourfulBeautifulindirect characterization 自然环境描写描写波涛汹涌1.The coas

15、tline was hidden behind the _ waves (汹涌澎湃的浪涛)with almost no one to be seen. roaring3. The big wind _(在耳边咆哮), and we were pushed away from the shore farther and farther.roared through our ears5. The fierce waves _(没有消退的迹象).showed no sign of dying down6. The sea was _(汹涌的；风浪大的) that day and it was dif

16、ficult to _(控制) the bodyboard.rough handle人文环境描写描写声音传来4. At that moment, a shrill whistle(汽笛声)_ (划破天空).1. A distant sound _.(传入耳朵)reached our ears 2. A soft, reedy(似笛声的) sound _. (漂浮在海上)floated across the sea3. The sound of the boat _.(在我们耳内回响)echoed in our earsripped the air人物描写描写疲倦5. Casting a loo

17、k at Tom, I could tell he was also _ _(明显地精 疲力尽了). 3. _ (尽管很累), we didnt stop. Gritting out teeth, we kept swimming. Exhausted as we were4. After what seemed a century, I felt _ (非常累) while swimming hard to keep myself afloat(漂浮着的). /ftigd/extremely fatigued apparently worn-out描写害怕1. I took a deep b

18、reath and_ (害怕地咽了口吐沫).swallowed hard4. Looking at the vast sea, I felt a sense of fear _ _.(在身体涌动) surging through my whole body5. As time ticked by, fear _(爬上我心头) and I could hardly tell how long I could _(前行).crept upon my heart (creep)plough on人物描写人物描写描写害怕7. I was _(被恐惧感淹没).flooded with a sense o

19、f horror9. I felt _(一阵焦虑) _(袭来).a wave of anxietyswept over my bodysweep描写挣扎努力人物描写3. .,We swam _(全力以赴地).tooth and nail4. We _(不遗余力地) swim towards the shore.spared no effort to5. We _(互换了坚定的神情) , then ploughed on (继续前行) _(难以置信的速度).exchanged a determined lookat an incredible speed人物描写描写如释重负4. On heari

20、ng the good news, Tom and I _(如释重负地叹了口气), grinning merrily at each other. sighed in great relief5. _ (如释重负地微笑), I _(感到一阵自豪). Smiling in relieffelt a rush of pride6. _ (狂喜) to see a boat coming to our rescue, Tom and I _ .(如释重负地松了口气)Overjoyedbreathed a sigh of reliefindirect characterization A 19-yea

21、r-old studentnatural settingcultural settingcharacters feelings/words/actions/monologues.A herocharacter traits: thoughtful/brave/courageous/considerate. One possible version: We discussed pushing them back to the shore, but we were too far out. We had to wait, trying to keep them on the bodyboards.

22、 Patting their faces to wake them up, we continuously told them to be strong. After what seemed a century, I felt extremely exhausted while swimming hard to keep myself afloat. Casting a look at Tom, I could tell he was also apparently worn-out. Looking at the vast sea, I felt a sense of horror surg

23、ing through my whole body. Salt stinging(刺痛) my eyes, I could hardly tell how long I could hold on. But I still shouted in my head: focus. In sheer（完全地） desperation(在绝望中), I finally caught sight of some boats with lifeguards on them heading towards us in the distance. Thank you, Lord. Quite soon, I

24、felt strong arms pull me out of the sea onto the board, and the two kids were sent to the hospital without delay. That night, word came from the hospital that the two kids were in good condition. Sighing in relief, I couldnt stop thinking about the whole event. I knew they would have died if they ha

25、d been in the sea for any longer. Obviously I had done a big deal which is surely a good opportunity to show off. I had expected to experience some sort of sense of wellbeing or greatness, but none of that came. Rather than feel like a hero, I believe anyone who could swim would have done the same thing.